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3.36. Another Cell, a Different Interrogation

🕑 Added 2023-02-04 13:15:53 +0000 UTC

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3seed

Thank you! I'm glad to hear that book 3 is holding up. :)

Amber Gregory

I'm finally caught up on all things Eight, and so happy that the story seems to be getting more and more interesting with each chapter. What a wonderful gift a good author has.

3seed

It's always fine to provide constructive criticism, thank you. The point's a fair one too. My challenge from the moment I started writing book 3 was to find a way to keep it from becoming macabre or overly grim. The first half had the potential of being such a downer that I may have swung too far in the other direction as an overcompensation. I'll read the novel all the way through once it's done, and that'll be when I have the chance to review and refine the emotional journey.

Lhexa

Also, I have a note of criticism that I'd like to articulate while caffeinated. Eight's excitement about the tournament comes across as ghoulish to me. Eight's mentor died a week ago along with the whole family, and Eight just witnessed another family drained of their lives. Yet half his thoughts are about the tournament. He's excited about a new project when he's just witnessed horrors. When you come back to this story in later revisions, maybe you could shift a big part of this excitement to Teila, or have the hunters treat tournament planning more explicitly as a coping mechanism, or move some of the planning to later in the book. To balance the criticism, please know that it took an act of willpower to write up this comment _before_ reading the latest update, and I generally stop whatever I'm doing Saturday afternoon to read the story. It's the only (in-progress) serialized story besides Mother of Learning I haven't eventually lost interest in.


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