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Sexy Sect Babes: Chapter Three

🕑 Added 2022-02-17 02:37:36 +0000 UTC

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Joshua Whitmore

You are welcome!

Blue Fishcake

Thanks! Not just for being subbed for so long, but for saying you enjoy the new story :D I know I was very nervous about switching to such a wildly different genre.

Joshua Whitmore

hey there word smith! I have been a member since like chapter 13 of sexy space babes. You work has been a very enjoyable escape from our world. I read alot of eastern novels (been a wuxia member forever) and one aspect of this I have really enjoyed is the perspective of the mayor. I found it refreshing and fun. I really feel like Xin has his own voice.

Shorlas Magaskawee

Nanoforge. Our mighty worldcrafter appears to have added a new section explaining that and a few more things.

Matt Bradock

Well, it makes sense for an off-world hazardous environment mining rig to come with a fabricator unit with pre-loaded blueprints to utilize in-situ resources and make spare parts or basic machinery. Then the basic machinery can make more advanced machinery.

Maddest Hatter

What does he have in that suit that let him build a supervillain base in three days?

Blue Fishcake

EDIT: A seven hundred word Jack POV interlude has been added after the arrival at the mine.

Blue Fishcake

At the minute I'm just churning them out as fast as I can write them. That will likely change into a proper release schedule a few weeks down the line.

Blue Fishcake

Not a bad point at all! Though I loathe going back to change things (because that's a slippery slope!), I think that this chapter might benefit from a short MC interlude immediately after being shown to the mine. Admittedly, it was always part of my plan to have this story be seen mostly from perspectives outside the protagonist, but not at the expense of reader comprehension. The story would benefit from knowing Jack's powers, limitations and goals. (I say little on personality, because his circumstances are such that he's going to be wearing a 'mask' most of the time anyway.)

Do you have a release schedule for this book or is it more random in nature? I ask because so far I’m loving the new series.

ATXAdventures

Thanks for the chapters, keep up the great work 👍💪

E.P.B.F.

I dunno. I can't quite put my finger on it why, but so far this just does not grip me. We're three chapters in and i couldn't give less of a damn about the protagonist. I mean i get the need for world building given the setting is a literal alien universe, and using native POV side-characters to dump that info is a good method for doing it. However in this case it seems to have come at the expense of properly introducing the main character. We hardly know anything about him: what's his personal backstory, what are his plans, his strengths, his flaws, his limitations, and most of all why should we care? All we really know is his name, that he has power armor of undefined OP(-ish) capabilities and that he's something of a whiner and a boor (i mean 'living god', really?). Overall it reads like we're missing a couple of chapters from Jack's POV where he explores the new world he's unceremoniously been thrust into, establishing his character and goals for the reader. Just my 0.02 of course. YMMV.

Orion Dye

It is a little annoying, maybe start to tone it back for the female lead and townsfolk as they get to know the protagonist and bring it back as you reintroduce new characters from other places.

TheDevotus

Really great read so far, goes down real smooth, I will probably end up liking this more than Sexy Blue Babes due to fantasy elements. Btw, what are your plans for the release schedule going forward?

White Neko Knight

Oh hey, he can build things! I wonder what his tech tree looks like and if he can perform research.

Blue Fishcake

Certainly it is in the case of the 'native' POVs. I deliberately gave it a slightly more flowery verbose prose. However, if that is getting in the way of reading and story itself, it would be wise for me to cut back.

Christopher Manoff

I'm loving this, my friend. I can't wait to read more and see where this goes.

Orion Dye

Not bad so far, it’s a little wordy though. Feels like your writing full paragraphs to say what could be said in a sentence or two. Not sure if intentional or not.


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