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Feral Mage Book 2: Chapter 30 -Sex Scene-

🕑 Added 2025-06-08 04:48:28 +0000 UTC

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Chase Kilgore

I appreciate it man! I’ll make the changes and tweak these sentences

Steve Wells

I don't see any typos, but there are a few issues with sentence structure. Saliva ran down his shaft as she tried to take as much of him in her mouth. (as possible) She almost seemed to forget to breathe and, after a few seconds, released him, gasping for air. (delete almost) Her ears were flat, and her tail(s) moved erratically as she stared up at him with lustful eyes. The hairs outline the pink slit revealed to him as he spread her legs. (This sentence reads awkwardly.) Let me know if this is too much. Loved the chapter!

Posiden 300

All this means is more tail brushing and that's all that matters.


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