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De'Vas Chronicles Book 4: Chapter 13

🕑 Added 2025-06-27 01:36:57 +0000 UTC

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Pixel

'I lived like most beastkins, in the wilds.' - either no comma here or a colon (or --), depending on intended meaning. 'Ash, though, with his lack of camping experience, there was only one thing he could help with.' - this sentence doesn't flow well. It's a bit start and stop to my eye, but maybe some thing like ', only really had one thing ...'? 'that Fayleen had' - just a typo ^^

Not a clever man

Wonder if the elf with heterochromia is following them…

Logan

It appears rifting has done the three of them some good after all. Ash is less dense and Haylee and Selena are now less shy and more direct. Suppose Ash's improvement gives Cleo a chance now.

Posiden 300

Pro wrestling is fake!! The fight for third has begun.


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