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De'Vas Chronicles Book 4: Chapter 18

🕑 Added 2025-07-07 16:59:51 +0000 UTC

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Chase Kilgore

Thank you man! I’ll get this fixed

Pixel

'They ensured that when' - I'd suggest putting 'that' in italics. It'd put further emphasis on it and aid readability. Not sure if it's just me, but I fell into a garden path and had to read it twice. 'no longer casts flirtatious' - should be 'cast' to maintain tense ^^ 'All I ask for now is' - I'm leaning toward putting commas around 'for now', but that is probably mostly a preference thing. Not sure if it's actually the best option. 'shown me. I can' - should be a comma. Things are picking up ^^ I like it ^^

Dual.

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