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De'Vas Chronicles Book 5: Chapter 2

🕑 Added 2025-10-06 15:45:13 +0000 UTC

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Chase Kilgore

Eva will say they help her/they have blue light filter (100% aesthetic and she likes the way they look)

Not a clever man

Does she actually need glasses, or is it just part of her aesthetic?

Pixel

'her suggests that' - typo, wrong tense 'The Twins jalapeno poppers' - missing possessive: 'The Twins' jalapeno ...' 'Few understood teleportation and portal magic even close to him' - this sentence feels odd, like there's a disjunction between the last four words and the rest 'hitting the shopping hard' - should probably either be 'hitting the shops hard' or 'shopping hard' 'especially while with' - I think you forgot to delete a word during a rephrasing, or this is just a phrasing I haven't heard before ^^ I absolutely LOVE the translation of herald to secretary ^^ It's wonderful and perfect and Eva is really blooming as a character from it ^^ Didn't see that coming, but I'm a huge fan ^^

Posiden 300

Such a great chapter. It may be time to start sneaking or making some guns. The surprise factor of whatever army hitomi brings would give an advantage. Ashs mother could start buying up antique wepons so the human government wouldn't be to suspicious.


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