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Feral Mage 3: Chapter 18

🕑 Added 2025-10-10 04:54:33 +0000 UTC

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Pixel

'muffled conversations' - not sure if this is always singular or if it can be plural... If you care, do your own research, it's like 7 am so that's all you're getting xD -- Actually, the next bit uses singlur 'conversation', so just pick one :P 'renown to dine' - drop the 'to' here 'Frozenviel' - typo 'Callie looked away from the Duke, her blue eyes focusing on him before turning back' - I know it's Bryce she looks at, but it took me a second read to work it out. I think using his name here instead of a pronoun might be an easier read, especially with the following sentence referring, I assume, to a different 'him'. It gets a little confusing 'taking a position against' - I think the more correct thing here is to drop 'a' 'moment ago. Something Bryce' - I'm partial to a comma here instead of a full stop 'Duke’s ear, and' - def. drop this comma 'nothing more and' - if you want a comma before an 'and', this would be a good place as it feels more like two "statements" than one ^^ 'has fallen, and' - compare an contrast to here, where it's more like one long statement, or argument, so I'd drop that comma ^^ (This has been you free interesting punctuation insight of the day - Subscribe now for more! xD) (P.S.S., I won't point out all of these ^^ They're generally not too important, but this time, they just lined up perfectly as a teaching moment ^^) 'Every time Thea dragged you to events like this, you’d come back prickly' - consider flipping this entire sentence to present tense as she's very pointedly still doing it ^^ I love seeing this softer side to Callie ^^ I could already see her being lined up for the harem, and while they've had a lot of sexual tension and chemistry, it's nice seeing them have actual romantic chemistry and the signs of a healthy relationship outside the bedroom ^^

Chase Kilgore

Good catch! Thank you, man!

Kyle

Very interesting chapter! found one error. "Bryce’s blood chilled as she stared at her." He instead of she.


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