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Feral Mage 3: Chapter 19

🕑 Added 2025-10-10 04:57:40 +0000 UTC

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Pixel

'monstrosity. It was just several corpses Harold Volson stitched together after all' - multiple things, here's the version I suggest: '... monstrosity; it was just several corpses Harold Volson had stitched together, after all' (Full list of changes: turned full stop into a semi-colon, inserted 'had', and inserted a comma before 'after all' - that last one, I'm a little unsure about. My gut says comma, but I might be wrong about it) 'had brought for him' - not sure if 'brought' or 'bought' is better here 'its gauntlet hands' - are the hands literally gauntlets or are they gauntleted? 'them; then' - a regular comma would probably be better here 'the one Callie face' - typo, should be 'faced' 'abomination’s weaker state' - should probably be 'weakened', unless it's a multi-stage fight :P 'we should have heard the battle' - sudden shift in perspective; should probably be 'they' 'the mage watching the Duke’s noble guest with a frown' - which one? Or is this a typo and supposed to be 'guests'? That certainly took a turn.... Sir, how very dare you leave us there!

Brian T

It’s cruel to leave us hanging like this! And there’s no way Ciarra is going to stand for her champion being made a puppet by the follower of another god or goddess. We’ve seen that she’s very possessive.


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