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De'Vas Chronicles Book 5: Chapter 4

🕑 Added 2025-10-22 01:35:00 +0000 UTC

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Not a clever man

I am surprised that Ms. Grayson is still allowed to be in De'Vas after an entire year. I am also amazed by Mei's turning into a bad ass. I am not surprised she has moved down this path, but by how much she did so.

Pixel

'that of his daughter’s, rather than his wife’s' - I'm pretty sure this doesn't take possessive 'everything from local businesses such as the fish farms, craft brews from The Twins, and even an upcoming recital by the district’s school' - I'd change this to something like '... the fish farms and craft brews from The Twins to even an upcoming ...' for cohesiveness 'gap-tooth smile' - I think this should be 'gap-toothed', but I'm not sure 'Perhaps I should make a reservation?' - missing italics 'You, bitch' - no comma here 'sent a message' - should be 'sending' 'she won’t say' - should be 'wouldn't'


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