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30 Taking Off the Shackles

🕑 Added 2017-07-06 05:25:51 +0000 UTC

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Monsoon117

Thanks for finding these problems, and I'll fix them right away. Glad to hear you enjoyed the chapter!

Pixelblade

It would indeed be awesome were he to become a motherfucking sorcerer. A few mistakes I spotted: -pleshy (should be fleshy) -She gripped the long, black talons on her fucked up feet straight towards my arms (the 'gripped' seems a bit weird, perhaps 'pointed' or 'angled' might be better) -peice of her aside (piece) -She hugged her legs against her chest as he said (he should be she) -She frowned as I she glanced away and said, (something snuck into your sentence there) -I wondered off into one of the nearby dungeons (should probably be wandered but I could be wrong on this one) -We are incerely sorry for any undue greivances (sincerely and grievances) -Is that okay or naw? (I'm not sure about this one. If this is correct just ignore this non-native english pleb) Anyway thanks for the exciting chapter


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