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43 The Rest of Humanity

🕑 Added 2017-08-11 23:19:30 +0000 UTC

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Monsoon117

Thanks for the help, I'll fix it right away.

John Thomas

Quick editing note: "When a giant boulder With so many pillars crushed, the bridge above us caved inwards before collapsing." From what I can tell, you're saying a boulder hit something, and then since so many of the bridge pillars were crushed it collapsed. Either way, you're missing part of a sentence here.

Definitely agree with Noah. His interactions with with other people like in this chapter are always so entertaining and fun.

Monsoon117

It could create some interesting social dynamics for sure. I'll see if I can't steer the direction of the story so that there's more interaction between the normal people and the abnormal. Thanks for mentioning this.

obviousPenname

Thanks for the awesome chapter! I'm still loving the story, but one thing has been bothering me since I started reading it. Whenever you introduce human characters, they seem to just appear for a moment and then are written off. I understand that Daniel is very divorced from humanity at this point, but it just feels a bit weird to me. Half the fun of reading some of these stories, in my opinion, is seeing the weak and the strong interact. The stark difference in power makes for some interesting interactions. Regardless, I'm still greatly enjoying this story, and my criticisms barely impact my enjoyment. I just feel that it's a bit of a missed opportunity. Keep it up!


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