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64 Final Call to Action

🕑 Added 2017-10-17 17:06:42 +0000 UTC

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Monsoon117

He does, and it may eventually happen, but having them suddenly head over heels would be forced.

Etez

Ok... *inhales deeply* CMMMMMOOOOOOOOON, when do you make it finally happen?!?!?!?! I want that sweeeeeet sweet DANIELxALTHEA! Daniel needs some sweet things in his life. x)

Monsoon117

He's trying to tell her that she'll never get to figure out the person she is if she can't push past this one last hill.

Naoggeddon

I get that he wants her to be motivated towards inproving herself but it feels kinda like he's forgetting she used to be a caged unwilling bounty hunter with seemingly no personal choices, now here she is trying to figure out what she is without those strings and what it's like to just be a person

Umut Numanoglu

He started crafting and has yet to finish it. And yup the typo is really misleading, I read it thrice.

Thanks for the chapter, "The entire time we walked" it should be talked, right? Also didn't he already crafted a rifle for her, or did i misunderstood something?

Monsoon117

Thanks again Chrome. I've been trying to pay a bit closer attention to grammatical details since you started editing. Hopefully that'll let you immerse yourself in the writing a bit more.

Chrome

before althea frowned at me, (her name should be capitalized) With that finished, cleaned up the area. (sentence is missing subject) Thanks for the chapter, I liked this one a lot.

Monsoon117

I'm hoping to inject tiny slice of life scenes to show the impact his attributes have had on daily tasks. It would be cool to show contrast with other people too.

Argetsword

It's good to see the MC not ripping someone apart or being ripped apart, he deserves a little break.

Monsoon117

That is excellent to hear. Glad you enjoyed it.

Efflorescence

Ahhh, this was a nice change of pace.

MAJmuffin

eey, nice light hearted chapter man, they also deserve a break now and then.

Monsoon117

You're good lol. I'd call my novel a bit too dark and gritty for LN status, but to each his own. I was hoping this would show a different, less violent side of Daniel. That, and elaborating on Althea's lack of motivation.

28th00

You've got a cooking chapter now, a few more and you'll be just like a JP LN!~ (That was a sarcastic joke, not meant to insult you or anything, but omg. They never stop with the cooking in any of their novels, it's ridiculous.)

Monsoon117

Let me know what you guys think of the chapter. Trying to show the characters from a different angle, maybe elaborate a bit more on their motivations.


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