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215 Out of Fire and Into Hell

🕑 Added 2019-05-14 03:45:25 +0000 UTC

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Alex R

He didnt have any backup plans because he doesnt believe that anything that he plans could go wrong

alexander julian

I'm honestly a little surprised Thisbey didn't have ANY back up plans. At the very least I thought he'd be backed up against a spire with a plasma gun from his spatial storage and getting overwhelmed but I guess not

PloofDoodle

Purge the Xeno! Cleanse thine species!

Edmund Latham

A note at the start of the chapter to say it is Thisby's POV would be helpful, as the sudden change is jarring, especially as almost the entire novel is from Daniel's perspective. Even writing 'Thisby' and placing it in italics would be sufficient. I think it would be best to just have a note in another chapter that Thisby was killed by Silvers, rather than this whole monologue as it dilutes the focus of the story, especially as it breaks the flow between the cliff hanger and its resolution. However, I know people like reading chapters like this and they can be a therapeutic break for authors as well as help each side better understand the character, so they are more convincing when you read about them in the mainline perspective. My suggestion would be to have the chapter as an interlude at the end of the story arc as a fun extra. Thank you for sharing this story. It's one of the best webnovel litrpgs available!

Monsoon117

True. I'll do that now.

Leonard Marchant

The beast drilled into me, and pain erupted like a fiery eruption going into my belly. This could use some revision.

Monsoon117

That's how it started, but it grew too big to put into one chapter without destroying the 'flow' of the other segment.

Think this could've been condensed a bit and slapped onto another chapter, but still enjoyable for sure.

Vin Reisling

Actually disgusting, good stuff though!

s476

Well written!

Joshua Little

Seemed excessive or drawn out to me. Like some kind of torture porn for someone with personal hate for Thisbey. Written well but didn't feel like progress itself other than the Thisbey/Tohtella interaction especially because Thisbey didn't actually die at the end so that loose end is left open. Might just be me.

Joshua Little

Thanks for the chapter.

Monsoon117

They are a nightmare incarnate, that's for sure. This is a much closer representation of what most people think of when they hear silvers.

Monsoon117

Yes he can with his four followers bonus. It gives him the flexibility to create whatever sub-guilds he needs though, like an assasin's guild for Althea and the like.

Alex R

Can Daniel create subguild within his actual guild with other people in charge? Like a Mage's guild with Torix in charge etc.

Monsoon117

They'll get assist exp for sure. It's not a ton though since Thisbey was lower level then both of them, though there's a bonus considering his bounty level. Tohtella would give much more overall by comparison.

Sebas Tian

Paint a pretty gruesome picture there. Well done!

Kazzy

I enjoyed this chapter for two reasons. The first is that Thisbey finally gets what he deserves. Very therapeutic. Secondly it is fascinating to see the horror of the the silvers from someone who is on a more reasonable power level. I really enjoyed this chapter!

Alex R

Fitting end for a terrible being. Wonder if Daniel/Althea will get XP for his death even though they didnt kill him. I'm assuming his turning into a constantly regening good source for the silvers.

Monsoon117

Let me know what you guys thought about this. I'll try to post another chapter today since this chapter doesn't satiate the last cliffhanger in the slightest outside of some grim satisfaction. That's why I waited to post for so long. Getting Thisbey's voice 'right' took a few tries as well, but that kind of challenge is often times refreshing.


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