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244 To the Forefront

🕑 Added 2019-10-26 03:15:24 +0000 UTC

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Shannon Smith

Torix's speach sounded like a supervillain monologue, lol.

Wrath

Damn the speeches are getting better and things always seem to get more more awesome and interesting. Keep up the great work and I'll keep on reading this awesome story.

Monsoon117

You're correct. I changed it to, "He took deep breaths for a moment, unnecessary as they were."

Monsoon117

This is really good. In fact, it's a better result than I anticipated. I'll be adding more chapters like this.

Monsoon117

Thank you. This is very heartening to see such a good result from emphasizing a different character. This foray has been so successful that I intend on doing the same for other characters that people enjoy. It should add a lot more depth and realism to the world. I'm learning a lot as an author too.

Monsoon117

There's so many aspects to the New World's Universe. Anytime I add emphasis to one thing, another falls short. Overtime, I intend to worldbuild on all the system's in place that I find interesting.

This might have been your best chapter yet I actually got goosebumps on my arms while reading the speech honestly felt like I was there for a bit which is incredibly difficult to do for a web novel considering the length of a standard chapter, the way you provided the menacing feeling inside of the words really drives home that despite being a "good" guy in this story Torix is still VERY much a lich and all that that entails. Very well done.

Qrystof

Hell yeah Torix. Now that's a speech!

Lockwood

This was a nice surprise to wake up to! Great chapter as always. Was "He took deep breaths for a moment, unnecessary they were." intended? I thought "He took deep breaths for a moment, unnecessary though they were." Sounded right to me? Idk I could totally be wrong.

Absolutely love this chapter. Torix really needed this and I feel he rounds out the "core" group now too. Thank you for the chapter and I can't wait for the next one

Bobby B.

Toy know, sometimes Torux reminds me of Overlord, in that, yes, he's friendly with his friends, but he's still an in human monster beyond death

Joshua Little

Thanks for the chapter.

Zachary Smith

Lit!

Manamaw

I really like these chapters where torix is the central point. After this mini arc is complete could we have more side chapter or diffrent view point with torix as the focus? The more of a spotlight he gets the more real the background around Daniel feels.

This is by far my favorite series and every time you post a new chapter I'm sad....Cause now I have to wait for the next! I wish I had the doctor's kindle so I wouldn't have to wait for you complete series of this amazing universe you have been building. I love how your also expanding on Daniel's crafting also, I always felt like you neglected it a bit.

Monsoon117

Thanks and fixed. It was most likely a typo or mis-fix from a text editor.

Zachary Johnson

"crippled" should be "cripple" when talking about using his singularities on the dreadnoughts. Wrong tense.

xdxx345

Torix actually edges out Daniel for me as my favorite character, so I loved this mini-arc. Don't get me wrong, Daniel is great as the MC and I think he drives the story best, but Torix is just awesome.

Monsoon117

I mean, two be fair, too's are to dang difficult.

Omega

Thanks, but we have moved from your's to too's now? We'll lead them to some jungles on Giess instead of too the Rak'Sha desert. Smart."

Monsoon117

Let me know what you guys think of the chapter. This mini-arc is supposed to be a highlight for Torix, showcasing his strengths and progress as a person. Let me know what you think about it and what I did right and wrong with it. I feel pretty good about it, and I intend on doing the same for several other characters further down the line if this has a solid reception. Anyways, hope you all enjoyed the chapter.


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