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252 Energized

🕑 Added 2019-12-06 00:34:59 +0000 UTC

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Monsoon117

It's an issue of how much it alters the state of their organs functioning, heart beating, etc. Daniel, well, he might not even have organs at this point.

František Novák

Schema was increasing radiation resistance through constitution right? Even these people should be capped at 100 constitution to gain the default cap resists.

Monsoon117

Thanks man. I can definitely make the chapters a bit longer if need be. I felt like I was overextending them a bit, though now it may have swung towards the shorter end. Either way, I'll keep this in mind.

Tom sawicki

Liked it a lot. The story is moving along. I think the only thing I would mention (choosing beggar, I know!) is that the chapters feel short and the endings feel a bit abrupt. Almost like a scene in a movie where it cuts to something else. Again, fairly nit picky but otherwise things are moving along nicely! Maybe a bit more world/system/lore building with schema, the old ones, and the other parts of the galaxy. Keep it up! Great story!

Monsoon117

They didn't know it was to this level, however. This is several orders of magnitudes higher than previously thought.

I thought they already knew that the mana supply of Lehesion is greater than a spatial fortress since it was the overseer himself that said it before the first battle with Lehesion?

Gabriel

Yes let's harness hell energy; what could go wrong. <-<

Hana Buechel

Wonder how Schema and the sentinels will react to that info. Looking forward to next chapters

Joshua Little

Thanks for the chapter.

BrauBaer

Thanks for the chapter!

Sebas Tian

he just can't catch a break can he xD

Monsoon117

To be honest, you guys don't know if the fortress still isn't enough. Spatial fortresses are pretty hard to take out after all.

Monsoon117

This is good. I used a couple purposeful techniques to make that happen. Hearing that they worked is amazing, so thank you. It reaffirms what I'm doing and gives me confidence going forward.

Monsoon117

Thanks and fixed.

Kevin Ramos

Oh boy would you look at that, MC WAS RIGHT ABOUT THE FORTRESS PROBABLY NOT BEING ENOUGH.

Aidan MacFetridge

Also, nobs->Knobs

Aidan MacFetridge

Hey Monsoon, loved the chapter. Keep up the good work.

ChrollosLucifer

It was even more fun to read, thanks Monsoon. Also "Only the two of us are resistant to radiation the tails radiation," maybe a mistake there/double.

Backfire

I like how this chapter sets up the narrative, the epiphany felt pretty natural and now we have a reason why Schema can't just make all of their problems go away. Seems like a pretty damn good reason for him to get that third legendary ability - and with it, a sovereign class.

Backfire

Only the two of us are resistant to the (radiation) the tail's radiation." extra word

Monsoon117

As always, let me know if you catch any obvious errors, either in logic or the grammar. Always looking to sharpen my craft, and you guys are instrumental in that. Improvements aside, what did you all think of the chapter? I hope it was exciting and fun to read. It was pretty fun to write, though the radiation bits took a bit of research.


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