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264 Family Problems

🕑 Added 2020-05-07 10:32:58 +0000 UTC

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so...."In all honesty, I don't know. If I wfere you though.......maybe take out the f........

Shannon Smith

Anyone else feel that with Florence paving the way, and the awe and fear they have of Daniel, Earth is going to be the start of another empire? One Daniels won't even want, but will be shoved into his hands anyways?

Jeff091

hi, thanks for the chapter typo wfere

Connor Alexander

Awesome chapter, Thanks for the work!

Pretentious Slime

Haven’t read the chapter yet, but I come back to find I’ve been graced with two chapters that somehow slipped my peripherals. My pleasure can only be described as euphorically immeasurable.

Bobby B.

The satisfaction level is over 9000!!!!!!!

Conor McGroarty

Nearly forgot: the Empire will definitely have to go through a reform considering their tendency to have rebellions. But it will have to wait until after these rebellions are put down and on their own terms so that way they aren’t giving in to rebellion and becoming unstable from rushed reformation that eldritch and others can take advantage of. MC can also take note of what not to do and what he should as he will likely own worlds in the future (besides Earth) and will need to iron out the details to make it harmonious (perhaps having the indigenous races making their own guild and having it be subordinate to the Harbinger’s legion? Basically give them a measure of autonomy and choice besides some overarching rules the Legion can’t back away from). Also wonder if MC is going to be running into Lehesion during this hell jump (I do so like the ODSTs from the Halo series and their nickname of “hell jumpers”).

Sam4005

really nice chapter

Idan tal

GREAT Chapter 🤩🤩🤩 please release some more soon, this renew world building is so fun to read

Joshua Little

Thanks for the chapter.

Omega

Thx. Man, they really let their ego get in the way of hteir work

Ferco

I really enjoyed the chapter, thanks :)

Conor McGroarty

“Siblings: children of the same parents, each of whom is perfectly normal until they get together.”- Sam Levenson There isn’t really a cookie cutter formula for siblings and so you have leeway with how you write and present it. I don’t believe it was a bad job as in my experience siblings are only ever completely harmonious when they aren’t around each other (which isn’t saying much since that can be said about anyone). Even if it is some small thing like taking that soda that wasn’t yours or something, or misplacing something, there will almost always be some small annoyances even when you get along. It’s worse when you don’t get along. In any case, here comes the Harbinger of Cataclysm being an agent of change again. Looking back, you would be hard pressed to find someone MC hasn’t changed in some way: Torix is a father figure, Althea tries more and is his lover (plus she doesn’t have to worry about losing control except in extreme circumstances like exposed to way too much mana like MCs), Kessiah gained confidence (and didn’t get to tap that booty and probably never will), Caprika became more mature, Helios was humbled and is still changing along with Florence it seems and gialgathens we’re humbled and saved from extinction (bit early to tell with Obolis but MC is an equal and your peers can change you in any number of ways). Even his enemies have changed albeit it is more like two dimensional stains and corpses that are then eaten but that counts as a change too. Now go Harbinger and expose Helios to more extraordinary sights Harbinger style

Reviv3pls

I liked this chapter I hope there is more of these funny chapters with helios and florence

Thanks for the chapter

Monsoon117

Lots of character development here, so hopefully you guys find it interesting. I know it's something different to explore familial relations in writing. Being rather young myself, I'm always worried I'll present these kinds of issues in a very unorganic, artificial way. That being said, I parsed through this chapter several times to make sure that wasn't the case. Let me know if I suceeded in that regard, and happy reading.


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