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97 Cataclysm Comes

🕑 Added 2017-12-28 22:20:33 +0000 UTC

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Lol. The more I read about him, the more he is like Gael. Even some of his behaviour and what he says. At least he doesn't have an auto-crossbow. But there is even phase 2, and lightning, and change in posture. Well, good thing he doesn't do flips. Forgot to mention that I'm talking about the follower, not Daniel

Typo: “Feinted”. “I fainted another right“

Monsoon117

I changed it so that Daniel is disrupted by lightning from the sword and other stuff. After giving the segment a re-read, I should have made that more apparent that he was being held back.

Monsoon117

I went ahead and added a few disruptions from Dakhma to stop him. A few arcs of lightning and swinging of his sword and what not.

Monsoon117

This is a fair critique. I'll see what I can do about it.

Arthur

Yeah I feel that way to, he kinda just stood there while his enemy transformed into something else, if anything I would have tried to kill him, atleast threw a few attacks to try to stop or mess with the transition

Leonard Marchant

I feel like Daniel waited too long during the transformation.

BlissForgotten

That is the saddest statement of the year, bar none. A beard committed suicide this day :(

Monsoon117

Thank you for all the help.

Deltoren

She tackled into the ground,=>slammed might be better then tackled

Deltoren

"His beard disintegrated his beard" => the blow disintegrated his beard

Deltoren

"The point of contact resulted in a whole being punctured through the cape." hole not whole

Deltoren

first

Monsoon117

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