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109 Calm Before the Storm

🕑 Added 2018-01-23 17:36:19 +0000 UTC

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Bartimaeus

I think this; She gasped, overwhelmed as her legs pulled me against me. The jolt of bliss flooded me too. should be; She gasped, overwhelmed as her legs pulled me against her. The jolt of bliss flooded me too.

Maritropa

Well shit,prepare the caskets,y'all!

Dax

I felt that bed scene was drag along too much but still great character development for the both of them. Also thanks for the major death flag raise.

Elvis Malkic

I liked the moment :D

Monsoon117

She was talking about him as a person. Geez, get the mind out of the gutter lol.

Leonard Marchant

“I always thought you would be big, but wow.” cringggggge... haha geez man really?

Brett Davis

maybe once they can use their souls in combat, but likely a partial shapeshifter rather than metal covered

Stephen Emrick

What would the children even look like? Buff metal covered babies that can change shape at will?

Monsoon117

He mentioned him once. Althea was very dismissive of it though. It happened like 4-5 chapters ago.

Joshua Little

Thanks for the chapter.

28th00

Now that you've planted the biggest and most ridiculous possible death flag (get it? Biggest? Heh. I REMEMBER MY DICK COMMENT FROM LIKE CHAPTER 10 OR SOMETHING! I REMEMBER!), how're we gonna see Ol'Danny Boy die? Or Althea die? Probably both at the same time. Totally. I mean, you haven't really been easy to predict since you've subverted the most obvious tropes, but still used less obvious ones every now and then. Screw you for that btw. Side note, lets see if magical BS can make hybrid species possible with something that most definitely doesn't have 99% DNA match. One is a Living Dimension, the other is an Eldritch Shape Shifting Hybrid Silver Alien Thingymajig. Questions for the future.

Samuel McCabe

What happened to that soldier who designs her guns that said he had a crush on her and Daniel said he'd put in a good word for?

Monsoon117

Good!

Monsoon117

Helll YEAHHH!!! And thanks for the help with the fix.

Chris Vogt II

Oh, and edit: “Yeah. That’s what I’d DO, at least. Yenno...” missed the “do,” there, I believe. And maybe make it all one sentence? “Yeah, that’s what I’d do, at least.”

Chris Vogt II

Nice. Was kind of surprised by the very end tho, like, I don’t think there’s really been any hint or foreshadowing that Daniel loved Althea. I mean, I always had the impression he liked, respected and appreciated her, while considering her a good friend, but I never saw anything more than that. Was it there and I just wasn’t picking up on it? Very well written chapter, tho. I can tell you put a lot of time and effort into and it paid off in spades. Thanks again for sharing.

Monsoon117

Thank you for the help.

Nicholas F

I think she knew understood that about herself, deep down. => I think she knew that about herself, deep down. or I think she understood that about herself, deep down.

Rodrick Dusio

This chapter brought the feels, calm before the storm indeed.

Nathan

Dammit Monsoon. Why you gotta do this just before the big battle. I'm worried she's gonna die now, or she gets trapped by Yawn.

That's what I'd at least -> that's what I'd do at least They love each other and I love this

Monsoon117

That's what I'm talking about.

Monsoon117

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Pixelblade

It was well written and well handled. (And way too sweet and lovely for my poor, poor heart) :p

"After the comfortable, wamr silence, Althea whispered" you swapped the r and m in warm. Keep up the good work, loving the story so far.

Alex Kagan

FINALLY!!!!!! Damn their tension was getting too thick. Awesome chapter.

Brett Davis

Hmm, a bit of an unexpected chapter, but it was needed character development

Monsoon117

Yes. Thank you.

Deltoren

I noticed her curved.=> I noticed her curved body?

Brett Davis

Thank you for the chapter, I'll give you my thoughts once I've read it

Monsoon117

I was worried about this chapter. I wrote it more than once, and I eventually decided on handling it this way. I hope you guys liked it.


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