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119 Watchful Waiting

🕑 Added 2018-03-16 05:21:48 +0000 UTC

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Monsoon117

Thanks for the help. Fixed.

Monsoon117

With Yawm's insane offensive potential, there's very few things that could.

Stephen Emrick

Sadly it feels like Yawm could do some good if he had someone like Daniel reigning him in. Unfortunately Daniel is not up for that task.

SquidTheJim

When they talk about fighting Yawm is like a kid begging for something from the store and Daniel is the stern parent who has to say no. Can't help but imagine Yawm with a sad puppy dog expression in these situations. :P

Joshua Little

Thanks for the chapter.

Monsoon117

That's a better word. Thanks for the tip hazenrage.

Monsoon117

I have all kinds of interesting bits in the next chapter that relate to this.

Monsoon117

That sounds awesome.

Monsoon117

Thanks for the edits and I'll let the story answer your questions about eldritch given time.

Tyler Babcock

Most people make the bad guys in their stories evil, while making it so the bad guys reason for being evil is the fact that they are evil. Every chapter in this arc makes me think of Yawm as a good guy forced into being evil due to his background. Even more so with the fact that his anger stems mostly from the "cipher poisoning" so to speak.

Thank you for the chapter. Instead of describing the pillars as the same, i would use "alike".

Stephen Emrick

Still liked the chapter though. I just like to keep my eye out for twists. Thanks for the chapter.

Stephen Emrick

The plan is to trap Yawm somewhere else. Without Ajax he cannot teleport right? Yawm dungeon core trick sounds like a somewhat uncontrolled teleportation. I think if he put effort into it he could use it to escape. Kinda forboding for Daniels success rate.

MattMick222

Monsoon seems like you have more confidence in the direction of your story and it show in your writing. Congrats.

Chris Vogt II

“Even eldritch understand when THEY’RE...”

Intimidating Swan

Thanks for the chapter!

striderfighter

Its attack rendered moot by a lack of levity

BlissForgotten

I love the sheer amount of bullshit Daniel is throwing at Yawm. Fake it until you make it! He's showing that social skills can save your life even with low charisma.

MAJmuffin

nice chapter boi

Grevis165

I really enjoyed this chapter, yoy did a great job describing the mafical stuff going on with the core. I also like the idea of Daniel having a few really powerful eldritch under his command. Those eldritch could also each have their own small army under their command... Which could make him an enemy of Schema? Or perhaps he would use that army to clear planet-sized rifts? How do eldritch feel about eldritch on other planets? Also, some edits: "creepy asselk" --> "creepy-ass elk" ;;; "Even eldritch understand when their no longer staring at a sheep." --> "Even eldritch understand when they're no longer staring at a sheep." ;;; "Yawm raise a hand" --> "Yawm raised a hand"

Argetsword

You could have him visit an alien world and create a whole eco system made by eldritch

Monsoon117

Hell yeah. I really like describing new dungeons, so I had to squeeze that in there :x

Kevin Ramos

It turned out like some foreplay before the main event. Tantalizing yet unfufilling. IE: love it looking forward to the fight.

Monsoon117

I had a lot fun writing this chapter. Let me know how it turned out guys.


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