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🕑 Added 2018-04-09 00:25:31 +0000 UTC

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Monsoon117

Torix is pretty unknown in the galactic environment. Everywhere Yawm goes, he makes a splash. Torix doesn't really do that. He finds a nice, dark place and sets up shop for studying. Also Torix was mentioning legends and rumors for the most part. He had never met Yawm.. Now the minions on the other hand knew that Torix had met Yawm(Etorhma, I shouldn't reply to comments when I'm tired lol). I'll go back to that chapter and clarify that. Yawm didn't know Torix, the minions did.

Synben28

I'm kind of confused about Yawm's reaction to Torix actually. Way back when Yawm's minions first showed up to capture Althea and Torix curb stomped them, they mentioned that Yawm respected him because of Torix having met Etorhma. The way Torix has talked about Yawm before has sort of made it seem like they had briefly met once or twice. At the least I would have thought that with his desire for knowledge, that Yawm would have heard of an archlich 500 years older than him with a penchant for gathering large amounts of knowledge

Kevin Ramos

Nice

Joshua Little

Thanks for the chapter.

Monsoon117

Ah man, that was some clever wordplay at the end of your comment. I appreciated it along with the content of said comment as well. All I can say is that those details are intentional.

BigBuckler

I think the thing bothering me about this whole "Livin' with Yawm" arc is that at some point, he has to realize he's being duped. You've painted him as this sort of best of both worlds Bruce Banner/Hulk combo, so there is no way that Daniel could continue pulling the wool over his eyes indefinitely. Especially now, since he is willing to wager his life to keep his abilities or levels a secret. Yawm has to be curious about that. After a certain point, it's gonna feel like willful ignorance on Yawm's part (and tbh, it kinda already feels like that to me). I am interested in seeing how this all plays out, just thought I'd add an extra two cents to my pledge.

xydra22

HIS REGEN ECLIPSED HIS HEALTH, She lost before it began.

28th00

You want to compare Regen of ANY KIND with this guy? He has such high HP that he somehow merged his Mana into his flesh so he gets double the Regen among like 4 trees that multiply it. Not to mention his stats are insane and ALL feed into Regen...

Efflorescence

I liked it.

Zeal Iskander

The beginning feels somewhat clunky (I feel like the characters are taking everything a bit too casually? Something like that), but it’s alright. Don’t bother trying to rewrite it, I doubt you can make it much better given what you’re working with. The end is good. Pretty happy you addressed the fact that she could out Daniel, and I’d be definitely thrilled about a ‘fight’ between those two.

Monsoon117

This chapter was tough to nail. At one point, I scrapped it completely and did a re-write/re-plan. It should be fine now though. Let me know what you guys think of it.


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