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134 Anticipation

🕑 Added 2018-05-08 01:26:47 +0000 UTC

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Monsoon117

Thank you for this comment. It's very motivating.

Damien Roberts

Discovered this a few hours ago on RoyalRoad, damn what an amazing read. Glad I could catch this while it's in production, but sad that I've caught up. Enjoy the new donor though!

Stephen Emrick

Secret class War Incarnate unlocked? Or God of war unlocked!

DaQualyn Singleton

I'm just wondering what his class will be, he's got all the skills he needs for it.

Stephen Emrick

I think they were like intergalactic mercenaries that hunt bounties and unkowns.

Stephen Emrick

Well, he doesn't have to apply the stat points while Yawm is present. He can wait till he's away and then use them. I worry more about a critical mass situation. You can only compress matter so much afterall.

PloofDoodle

What are the breakers again?

Scott Frederiksen

What happens when he reaches a 1000 point benchmark in stats and his size jumps again? I know he's gotten better at controlling his size but doing it as it changes seems unlikely... And it's bound to happen soon enough even if he doesn't use his gaining points as the Cypher will eventually bump it at its current accumulation rate even though I feel like we missed an updated stat after his last upgrade to his Cypher.

Rande Knight

Amara stares at the screen of densely coded information. It looks to the untrained observer like screen snow. Her head turns around and creepily sings to Daniel "They're heeerrrre".

Stephen Emrick

Agreed, knowledge is power. Amara seeks knowledge but what is the goal she seeks with so much power. Helping Daniel takedown Yawm makes sense but what after that?

Maritropa

Great chapter,it seems the ride's gonna get bumpy for Daniel&Co if these badasses come knockin',also nice to see the info about the ID screens show up in the story :p

Zeal Iskander

That was a good chapter! Felt really, really nice to read. A good story needs a good villain, and Yawm's an excellent one.... if you could even call him a villain. Not sure I really like Amara, though. Yawm's motives are understandable, Amara's... less so, for now.

Monsoon117

I think what you're feeling is a lack of combat, which is a legitimate complaint IMO. For the last two dozen chapters or so, I've been prioritizing my characterization over other stuff. The main reason is because I want to grow as a writer, even if that means I sacrifice a bit of quality for practice. It's a long term strategy, because I intend on using it to make my characters better and more believable in future arcs/books.

Thomas

The whole Yawm thing is getting old and tedious imo, it was fine the first few chapters, but now even though some story is somewhat progressing, it still feels like nothing is happening and it has been boring to read for the last 20 or so chapters. I understand that you have to go through that to make to whole thing believable considering the stakes involved with Yawm and Schema, but to me it still feels a bit stale.

PloofDoodle

what phone is it?

Monsoon117

I didn't just master the path of Cliffhanger. I mastered the Path of Cliffhanger(Tier 9,001)

Dembed

I am no big Expert on how a chapter like this should be written, but I can say that the flow was constant and good pacing. Realy looking forward to the next chapters, though your story also needs to be read in bulk.... cause you mastered the Path of Cliffhanger. Maybe I am just addicted

Monsoon117

I don't know, but I can relate to your frustration. I tried writing on a phone once. Needless to say, I scrapped the chapter and never wrote using a phone again.

Stephen Emrick

Again wrote saying and it made it say. That's incorrect for a sentence. Who makes this shit for android.

Stephen Emrick

Does anyone know a way to disable auto correct? I'm so fucking sick of it. My words are spelled correctly to begin with. Also was say Thanos harbinger fight would be awesome.

Stephen Emrick

Harbingers thanos.

Stephen Emrick

Just saw infinity war. Daniel never showed up for the fight. I was slightly disappointed. Harbinger vs thanks would be awesome.

Monsoon117

I miss those guys too.

Wildebranch

I feel you did good

Joshua Little

Thanks for the chapter.

Wildebranch

At 10k Daniel is going to be as dense as a white dwarf, probably

Wildebranch

Nice, more levels! More endurance! They'll learn they can't move the unmovable. Also, shame overseer! You're like the rest, just wanting to use Daniel. That's why Althea and Hod are the best, and Torix. Miss the guys.

Nathan

I'm excited for new fights. Killing some breakers is exactly what Daniel needs to hit level 10,000. Eventually...

Kevin Ramos

More exp

Monsoon117

I'm trying to show how the history's of the characters have an effect on how they treat each other. Let me know how I did. This chapter was also VERY difficult to write because I wanted to get it right. It's one of those chapters I needed to sleep on for a while.


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