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171 Pieces of a Puzzle

🕑 Added 2018-11-01 19:09:17 +0000 UTC

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Monsoon117

Yeah, that's a difference I've tried to make clear since the beginning. Not everyone is equally industrious. The differences between industrious people and non-industrious people also exacerbates overtime. I didn't want to make it a primary theme, but I did want to subtly include it. The reason why is because I hate it when a character gains unearned strength, prestige, etc. without a good reason, planning, etc.

Pretentious Slime

I’ll just make up some good lines then: “First there was nothing... and then there was ME!” Kablam! “I call this one NAGASAKI!” Kapblush! “I always hated FLAT earthers!” Kappaaa! “In Soviet Russia, ground jumps on you! Kapoo! “Torix said I would get extra points for a belly flop!” Bluboosh! “Isic Newton would be proud 😭.” KABAAAM!

Pretentious Slime

Can he please say “stop! Hammer time.” Right before he falls? It’s definitly funny, but actually nevermind, should probably be something more in character.

Mason Sudul

It especially brings out more contrast between Daniel and the other characters, as they have all chilled out while he trucks on.

Monsoon117

Thank you and fixed.

Monsoon117

I decided on character arcs before I began the actual arc. It's made the development of every character much smoother and more consistent.

Monsoon117

He'll have an extra suit to pop on right after landing.

loimprevisto

The mages, warriors, and runic inscribers your training --> The mages, warriors, and runic inscribers you're training

Pixelblade

Shouldn't it be: "They'll have access to magic, won't they?" "Yes, they will"

Another question: wouldn't Daniel's armor be ruined when he crash lands? I’m also wondering how durable the suit is for it to withstand very high temperatures

Gabriel

I really enjoyed this chapter! :D

Connor Alexander

Its supposed to be "Yes, they will"

Connor Alexander

Thanks for the chapter Monsoon! The new dynamic of the story, with the characters less pressured to constantly do is actually rather nice. The development of each character is also progressing in a much more visible way (in my thought) that the first major arc and it does characters, who'd been relatively sidelined, justice. I like seeing more of Torix being an open dad figure and much less stressed about having to perform at his peak.

xydra22

I mean, he literally measures his weight in tons. And the simpler the plan, the less that can go wrong. Real question is how do they evac the silver compromised espens in the middle of armageddon?

Hana Buechel

"I'm tough. Real tough."... you have no idea how hard I laughed at this line after thinking about him becoming a human dinosaur destroyer ..A.K.A.. meteorite. LOVE this story so much, the most human, inhuman, bunch of misfit monsters.

Thank you for the chapter.”It was a solid trifecta for building off of”. Where is the mental preparation at this part?

.TheFear

Nice chapter! I loved the "I am tought. Real tough" haha

Alex Kagan

This chapter was awesome! It reminded me of a scene from The Princess Bride when the gang is at the wizards house who is worrying about the brute squad. Fezzik says "I'm on the Brute Squad" to which the wizard replies "You ARE the brute squad!" I'm just imagining Tohtella wondering how Daniel could pull that off without some sort of uber-nuke device, and Daniel is just going "I AM the uber-nuke device!" Loved it.

Pixelblade

'Torix cupped his chin, "They have access to magic, don't they?" Tohtella glanced through the footage, "Yes, the will."' ->something's wrong here I think Good to see the relationship between Daniel and Torix and Torix' character being more deeply explored. Question: Could he use gravity to create a vacuum around himself to allow for a faster, safer and deadlier orbital drop?

Magnus Gullhav Leikvik

their feet bleeding shards of metal ---> their feet bleeding from the shards of metal ???

Corwin Amber

thanks for the chapter

Jacob Santos

One punch man.

Michael Berkowitz

Knock knock, who's there?

Joshua Little

Good plan. Thanks for the chapter.

Monsoon117

He'll be like this, "I am the one who knocks."

Monsoon117

That was another reason the chapter proved difficult to finish in a day. Good to see it worked out well though.

s476

Most of it was perfect only thing I kinda stumble with is how we have no clue WHY torix thought it was a date: did daniel phrase it that way? did he say they would meet just by themselfs? how did torix get to that conclusion?

Stephen Emrick

Chapter when Daniel does this atmospheric re-entry should be titled "I am the hammer".

Jess Koch

It was well written. And it had a impressive length to it. Thank.

Gerardo Avila

Yaaaas thanks for the chapter

Alex k

If this doesn't. End in a slam jam meme ill be sad :)

Sebas Tian

Now all that's missing is some good old days.

Kevin Ramos

Daniel is a Barbarian without a level cap. Punching dosent work? Punch harder!

Monsoon117

Sorry for not getting this chapter out yesterday. I finished it, and it felt rushed. I re-did parts of it again today, and I felt good about how it turned out. Let me know if the scenes worked out and felt natural. I tried my best with making them have some oomph this time around.

Jess Koch

Second

Tyler Babcock

Thanks for the chapter!


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