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🕑 Added 2021-03-01 18:37:21 +0000 UTC

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Bum-Sama

I’m excited for this change of pace. It seems the story will become more exploration/adventuring and broadening the horizons. Before there was always a massive threat that needed preparation and attention, the hive eldritch->Yawm->Elysium. Looking forward to Daniels meeting with the Galactic Council and expanding his influence on Earth

Titaniumtac

I think the author is trying to move the story further, and still have a goal to reach, a nice opportunity for side quests if you will.

I think a very telling question Daniel could have asked them is: "If Schema agreed to change its ways, in return would every Adair be willing to sacrifice themselves and become Schema's mind-controlled slaves? Or if not every one, at least 9 out of 10?"

I thought Daniel let Elysium off too easy. I do not mean that he should have refused to agree to a ceasefire, but at a minimum he should have taken a harder line pointing out Elysium's evil and hypocrisy. Elysium committed terrible atrocities on the vast majority of the gialgathen race, and when Daniel called them on it, they said that they left a few of them unmolested and have them hidden away. As if that somehow makes it okay? And Daniel implicitly agreed with that reasoning by saying that he needs proof that they have some unmolested gialgathen's hidden away. Would have been much better to point out that 90% of a genocide is only slightly better than 100%, and demand that the other gialgathens be released immediately and some restitution made (to the extent that is even possible). Also, he backed off too easily from his demand that they stop turning sentient species into mindless monsters. Their justification that it would impact their war effort shows how they lack morals. "We need to commit atrocities and war crimes or we might lose!" is pure evil. I think the clearest indication that Elysium lacks morals was: "If you don't accept our generous conditions, understand that subsequent death on both sides is your fault exclusively." A chill ran down my spine as Tohtella continued, "That's why we're willing to forgive your previous transgressions, even the bombings on Giess." They refuse to accept responsibility for their actions. They are committing atrocities, but if anyone dares to fight back against them then it is their fault for defending themselves or other innocent people. That is some evil "reasoning" there. Daniel desperately needed a ceasefire, and he got one along with some concessions, so he did not do a terrible job. But he could have done a lot better. And what worries me the most is that after that discussion it seemed like Daniel was beginning to think that Elysium is not evil. As if he thinks that because they have a good goal (opposing Schema and helping some oppressed races) that the ends justify the means.

Monsoon117

It doesn't seem like I can un-delete it. They should have some kind of confirmation for the comment deletion at the least, so that misclicks won't result in missing comments that were awesome.

Monsoon117

@Kryn, I didn't mean to delete your comment. I was trying to load the replies, and the Patreon page fully loaded. That caused a slight jump in the positioning of the interface, causing me to accidentally delete the comment. I don't know how to un-delete a comment, but I'm going to try and figure out how.

Kryn

Your well being comes first, but I do very much enjoy the chapters. I been in counseling for major depression disorder (MDD) since I was 6 years old so I do really understand. Fight the good fight!! And thank you for the amazing story so far I look forward to the long haul.

Monsoon117

This is exactly what keeps me going. I'm very happy to hear it, and I'll keep up the hard work.

Monsoon117

Elysium knows that Daniel can settle on Giess, and the nearest habitable world that's close by is Earth. That's why the went to Giess in the first place. Settling on nearby worlds afterwards, EG, Earth, just makes sense. Daniel also doesn't resemble his species much at this point. Aesthetically, yes, but his size, stature, and ridiculous power make him seem more like some ancient species from some far off world, beyond Schema's domain. I'll mention something like that in the talks. It should be fun to offer perspective.

Monsoon117

Absolutely. I intend on showing the impacts of the conflict on both sides. This is a great reminder though, so mention this kind of stuff if you think it up. You never know if I may have glossed over something like this.

Sebastian Prue

Thanks for the chapter! I like where you're taking this story, for Daniel to just keep fighting while schema does nothing to help would be foolish. I hope to see some conflict between the two eventually but I trust you as an author.

Mink

they didn't mention it in front of the enemy, they had a sound barrier up so their conversation couldn't be heard

Kryn

Titaniumtac

I think that is internal dialog, the other mention is in the silence sphere with visual blocking.

Zed

Did The mentioning of earth infront of the enemy not reveal too much?

Regnal

I don't think Elysium would give in to technicalities. As soon as the deal is unfavorable it is off. Daniel's guild benefits way to much right now to risk something like that.

Regnal

I'm definitely excited for the story to head in this direction. Just letting Daniel have a breather to consolidate his gains will be invaluable for the future.

Jonathan

Expect recourse --> repercussions

Matthew T

So, Elysium won't attack, and cease any attacks against any territory under Daniel. Is there anything stopping planets under assault from Elysium from swearing loyalty to Daniel, so Elysium would have to go away? Or even the galactic council declaring Daniel their temporary figurehead until Elysium is dealt with? Hell, Daniel could leverage this hard, essentially walking into the council and declaring a potantial ceasefire under him.

Titaniumtac

On the next chapter can you go over how the hr (or so) of Lehesion cut of had an effect over different areas? Not a whole chapter mind you, just some quick glimpses of the relief it had on others ( or detriment)

Gamertecno

I had a terrifying thought while reading the chapter. Elysium is using Lehesion to power their system but he gets all that power from a Old one, doesn't that mean that anyone that is a part of Elysium's system can be influenced or controlled by the Old one?

Code Reed

Sure, possibly, but at a certain point the universe will be divided between Legion, Schema, And Elysium. Schema will have the power hungry, Elysium will have tired, but have fantastic R&D. And Legion will have the truly strong. Daniel doesn't want to rule, so he won't. He will just want to give the people a choice. Who they pick is up to them, so long as they have that choice. He will reclaim and colonize fringe worlds, Elysium will take the oppressed worlds, while the ambious, or morally upright split between Schema and Daniel. It will be an interesting ride.

Ash

Bro, I'm just loving the content, keep it up but damn im just waiting for his sovereign skill. I don't think I'm ready for it tho, it's deffo gonna be completely OP!

Code Reed

Ya know, I always wondered what the REAL last words of world War II was. Turns out it was probably short and sweet.

Joshua Little

Thanks for the chapter.

Lockwood

Ah yup I remember now. Thx

Archie Cook

It will be interesting to see what schema says to Daniels truce, since schema does not seem to be accepting of any form of system than himself nor will he accept any form of truce

Monsoon117

Glad to hear it.

Monsoon117

It means the exile process has to be finalized through a galactic council. They can essentially veto it for people who are a part of the galactic council.

Monsoon117

He wasn't. He wasn't in the battle to my knowledge.

Monsoon117

I think the reason the ceasefire comes as a surprise is because it was for me as well. I was writing the battle as planned, trying to stick to the story's internal logic. As I try to always do, I thought about the fight from each character's perspective. Who would do what with their abilities and why? What skills do they have? Etc. In the end, it didn't make sense for Elysium to want to keep on fighting Daniel's guild. They could mess each other up, sure, but it would be like trench warfare in WW1. Both sides are mangled by the end, and no one is happy. It made too much sense for them to form a treaty of some sort, so I went with the idea as it formed. I'm happy it worked out this way though. It lets me open up the universe and let Daniel help Earth, as he's wanted to for a longtime. Dungeons, exploration, wonder, meeting new characters, all that can happen now that this all consuming conflict has finally died down in a way that makes sense.

Shin

Agreed While i love seeing Daniel be a badass and punching dragons into oblivion this conflict with adair felt stretched lately so the cease fire finaly makes it possible to explore new frontiers for the world and daniels powers

Bobby B.

Really, this was the only way the war could realistically end, I'm happy with the level of logic followed by the price gouging

Tyicius

Without the war Daniel can finally consolidate all his gains. Everything that Elysium fears will happen it's just a matter of when. It doesn't seem that Lehesion will get stronger, he may get weaker. As more people join Elysium's system the energy demand increases. They've been given a life extension but ensured their destruction in the end.

Mink

not how i was expecting the battle to end, but it's just what i wanted. as daniel said, imagine how powerful he and his guild will be when he learns his sovereign skill, caps out his level, gets warping down, masters mind magic, manufactures hundreds of thousands of golems, etc. he really just needs a break from the constant war and he'll be a force to be reckoned with

Lockwood

Wow seems schemas very risky long con just fell through. Yikes. Also with Daniel being a Sovereign does that make schema unable to exile him or does it only exempt him being exiled through the "Forbidden research" and stuff like that?

Dominic French

This compromise sound awesome for Daniel, depending on Schema's response of course. It should Give Daniel time to finally start building instead of rushing from situation to situation in crisis mode. Lol we also might get to see get to see a bigger picture of how earth is doing now that Daniel has time. I will admit though I'm not quite sure how long Daniel has been in the system now? It feels like its only been like 6 months.

Ferco

I'm not a native english speaker, so subtle grammatical errors will probably go unnoticed, but I can assure you the last chapters have been excelent, and story wise, I think the cease fire is an excelent way for Daniel to focus somewhere else.

Corwin Amber

thanks for the chapter 'think as he enveloped' -> 'think as he was enveloped'

kyle

Very nice!

Gardor

Was Spear involved in the counseling session

Monsoon117

Ah man, I've got quite a few plans for this.

EvilGodAsura

No jabs here just honest thoughts. I really hope Daniel confronts schema about how he has been treated soon. Even if it goes nowhere we have not really seen one of these "Like talking to a brick wall moments" as I've not really seen any time schema has been unreasonable beyond what he is hard programmed for from my perspective as a reader. If anything Daniel is living proof that the system is effective. Just the fact that he lets Daniel keep an eldritch by his side shows schema has some leeway in its code.

Monsoon117

Writing is going well right now. I'm feeling on point and enjoying the process, and that reflects in both the output and quality of said writing. Let me know about errors of course, even complex issues. Talking them out is helpful, and you guys tend to be much better at delivering criticism than just random readers. In that way, I consider you guys the best of the best as far as feedback goes; you all focus on delivery and concision. That's nice when a lot of criticisms can be laced with vitriol and a lot of personal insults. I have a thick skin, which is why I can post online like this, but I still struggle with reading a torrent of snappy jabs at me and my work. Tangents aside, enjoy and I'm hoping that good days continue.


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