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423 A Broken Facade

🕑 Added 2025-04-15 21:22:57 +0000 UTC

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Monsoon117

Ah, that's good to hear, and fixed.

Zachary Smith

Hey monsoon I reread the chaps and agree it flows better. Good job buddy :) Grammar- first paragraph last sentence “siphoned” was used twice

Wrath

Very nice another old one.

HateMongerian

I as wondering why why the recap was different than I remembered. I swear, reading a dozen stories a chapter every few days has given me the weirdest memory for this kind of thing.

Monsoon117

I adjusted the last two chapters over the last few days. They're much better now, Imo, and they felt way better to read. If you have the chance, you can check them out, but tldr, Daniel's more confrontational in general. He also gets more fed up with the conversation in general as it progresses. It really changed the tone of the chapters in a way I enjoyed. As for this chapter, it was just fun to write in general. The next chapter should be a lot of fun as well. Enjoy, guys.


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