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Chapter 41 - Making Friends and Winning Influence

🕑 Added 2025-11-24 13:00:14 +0000 UTC

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Toffee Willow

Post writing all of this note: I am so sorry for my windbag of word vomit stew. Im not usually the type to comment at all, but as Ive been gearing to try writing more my brain has been reading more analytically and I wanted to try and give feedback so my apologies if it comes off at all rude. Im a few days late, but I have to agree with something said by another commenter after finishing. These chapters feel fast, almost feverishly so - like you desperately want to get to the next parts, as an aspirant writer I feel that in my core. That said the last 8(?) chapters read more like rough drafts for chapters, and I mean that as in the plural of the last 8 chapters easily could have stretched over 15 if expanded. I absolutely expect patreon chapters to usually be the more rough iterations, kind of like reading raw scans versus official translations for manga - its not 1 to 1 but its close? Currently the only big glaring hole I kind of see is how Alex didn't know that Erik got his throat slit? I mean this only constructively, but it feels almost like a forced hook rather than a fluid set of events. The heir to the most hated house in the wizard world gets his throat slit in the dorms and its not the talk of the entire school? Or at the very least the house that the two share? It seems a wee bit off (and I could be completely missing details on the setting you have in notes that would explain this as well). Overall, I am loving this story so far Selkie. It feels a lot like what I loved about BTDEM while being fresh and wholly its own story - minus the references to long time readers. I just find myself concerned if the pacing might end up causing character or plot inconsistencies somewhere in between.

Glitter Rabbit (C)

The money solution makes me happy for now. Sure, Felix will need to find a way to get more money later, but at least he is not going to struggle for now to have the basic necessities to learn magic.


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