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Chapter 1 - Introductions - Felix Sutter

🕑 Added 2025-09-28 12:28:01 +0000 UTC
Chapter 1 - Introductions - Felix Sutter

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Nicholas F

Good start! The firing scene feels off just because of how absolutely stupid it makes the manager look to be doing that in a room with foot traffic. People are dumb, but sheesh. Suggested alternatives is Charlie asks Felix to interact with the manager's office (grab something or ask him a question) and then he runs into Bill and Karen, or move the bus stop scene to before he gets to work causing him to be fired for being late due to missing the bus. Or we all collectively shrug and move past it to the next chapter, if I had just read the next three or four chapters that scene would be way in the rearview and I would be too busy thinking of what just happened to ponder on a trivial detail in the life is rough setup.

Makky

Is there a blurb somewhere for this?


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