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Chapter 19 - Landing II

🕑 Added 2025-10-31 13:00:10 +0000 UTC

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Glitter Rabbit (C)

I am really enjoying this series, can't wait to see where it is going.

RedInkQuill

Cursed scars scares kids until they’re gotten rid of in a couple C’s.

Selkie

I'm going mostly close person 3rd, but I do like being able to dip into omniscient 3rd now and then. Felix can see the wand, we get the details about it, and we get a few little extra details. If a lot of people think the extras aren't worth it, I'll stop - my experience is almost purely 1st, with very little 3rd - but I have no other way of communicating this, and it's fun.

Joris Kühl

One thing I've noticed with the recent chapters is the confusing PoV. Even in third person, there's a PoV, naturally assumed when we read someone's inner thoughts about something. In this chapter it's obviously Felix, but then when Alex pulls out her wand, we learn that it's a legacy of the Renard family, which Felix wouldn't know, so now I feel like I'm in Alex PoV. This is perhaps a poor chapter to point this out but it was much more pronounced in the 4-way conversation chapters on the Prydwenn. This can be quite disorienting. Think you could do some form of separation for these PoV changes in the same scene? I've seen something as simple as a bunch of dashes between paragraphs in other works.


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