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Wet American Summer (Part 23)

🕑 Added 2017-09-11 19:59:01 +0000 UTC

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Zach's Dad (Wei zhong zian)

That paragraph with her sort of seeing how's she's regressed to a baby, the best ever.

She does! But she's currently only wearing a T-shirt and a wet adult diaper haha, I think we can understand why she wouldn't escape at that precise moment, knowing she has to wait all night for the bus, travel on it back to the city and then from the city bus stop to her place, wherever that is... in just a wet diaper? I don't think so! But not to say that she has no longer a wish to get on that bus! Next chapter out soon ;)

WitchySarcasm

Now I love this story a lot, but I think we're reaching a tipping point with Ashley. In this chapter she was written as desperate at the end. Desperate to escape this rapidly closing trap. If we're following logic here, someone in her situation would absolutely not risk letting the trap shut by looking for her stuff for too long until the family comes back. A desperate Ashley will find some way to get onto that bus. Maybe the consequences of this weekend stick with her later, but sticking to the way she was characterized here means that she does absolutely everything and anything to get on that bus. Just my two cents.

Greast chapter!


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