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Industrious: Engineering Marvels - Chapter 14

🕑 Added 2024-05-01 09:58:07 +0000 UTC

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random_debuff

They should make a Hunter squad, a part of the club that deals with Rogues who hurt the regular populace and provide protection for politicians, helping people who hold high opinions of themselves when you have power they can't control has a 50/50 chance of helping.

Slayer Anderson

Believe it or not, this is me already making an effort to cut back. I like to write the way I hear the characters say things when I'm imagining dialogue, so that's why so many of my conventions might be a little 'off.'

thevolunteer

Excellent chapter. Shaw not twirling his mustache is a welcome sight. If I can make a slight technical criticism, I would tone down the use of italics. You aren’t quite at Leecifer levels, but over using them can fuck with the rhythm of dialogue and imo make a character sound like a condescending ass.

Slayer Anderson

It's admittedly a somewhat optimistic estimation, but at least theoretically possible. Mainly used here to intimidate Shaw into listening. But, yes. Many butterflies.

godUsoland

Glad to see this is before any of the cartoonishly evil stuff happens with the Mutants! Now let's see if they will step in and help end the war sooner. Also, 30+ years advanced technology back in the 1960s? Well now. That will be interesting. How would that change Politics, letting people be able to rapidly share video like that? The Civil Rights Movement in America? So many butterflies can come from having the world more connected/ globally aware back then. Will Wakanda be brought out into the open?

Slayer Anderson

Few people ever start out imagining themselves the villain of the story.

Guilherme Bezerra

An actual character/person Sebastian Shawn, will wonders never cease. NIce

Slayer Anderson

Glad you enjoyed it.

bloodalchemy

This chapter is gratifying on many levels. Its fun to mess with the self styled importance shadow leaders are filled with. It's fun to actually take a person from a long time ago and blow their mind about all the things we consider common and mundane in the present. Doing both at the same time, and having the moral high ground while doing it? It give all the happy feelings.


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