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Mind Games - Chapter 15

🕑 Added 2025-02-11 10:07:14 +0000 UTC

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Slayer Anderson

I understand your point and I'm really glad that you gave this one a chance despite your reservations. If it helps, I don't think the love confession issue is going to come again in a material way for a while yet.

Alzhan

Additionally, if it helps your decision making, I find that it would be very in-character for him to at least try to rid himself of that clause. Forcing your dad to not acknolwedge his love for you must be very galling, and there would always be a subconscious fear that at any moment, someone can suprise him with an unexpected expression of love. Sure, his supernatural body reading will probably warn him, but will that be enough for him to completely dispel that small stressful fear? Given his memory and intellect I know he has in the back of his mind the knowledge that he CAN still ask for more. Perhaps that might backfire on most requests, but a request that "technically" cripples him from a purely objective standpoint (so he's not begging for a powerup, essentially) and the non-standard nature of this world, alongside him already being barred from regular captures, I think it should be a fairly easy sell, especially to that overseer of his who seems to vaguely like him, and as such would not deny his request out of sheer spite or something. I LIKE pretty much every other aspect of the story, despite it being WC (your 200 IQ move to not tag the story on QQ is to thank that I didn't skip out on it since I despise Catalogue stories for many reasons). Shinzo's mindset, the AU changes to mha, the eldritch horror mystery brewing in the background, the alternate vigilante persona shenanigans that actually tie INTO the story rather than being a side of beat em up violent fanservice. You are a good writer, good enough that one story sold me, which just irritates me all the more, that this one clause is tarnishing it for me. I hope you think over my plea and consider it, but even if you don't, I'll repeat that you've got a great story here, so don't treat it as me lambasting your writing. (I sometimes come across that way, especially due to my habit of ranting)

Slayer Anderson

Hmm... thank you for the feedback. I'll look at things and consider how the plot is going to look moving forward. I can't promise anything, but I'll definitely consider the situation since you cared enough to reply like this.

Alzhan

I'm gonna be honest, this right here is singlehandedly my biggest gripe with the story. I didn't expect to encounter it immediately on the first chapter I read post subscription, but I really hate the love confession clause. It forces him to out the Company to characters, and I already hate WC aspects having any relevancy in the story, especially when a supposed good aligned character is working for them. It also simultaneously paints him as a weirdo, and I hate that this is forced because of WC bullshit rather than it being a character quirk. I really REALLY hope that he can work out a deal with the Company pronto to no longer be beholden to that stupid rule. Maybe leverage their fuckups? He mentioned he could have raised a much bigger stink, so asking for what's essentially a "handycap" to a regular Company employee should be fine.

Slayer Anderson

Cassandra herself doesn't usually *do* much of this herself, but she knows how to after a crash course in it. She's also frequently observed other members of the Bat Clan do so. The technical expertise is largely from River and the methodology skills from the Sidereal.

Cole Deucalion

Oh wow. I didn't think that would apply to like parental, or even platonic love. That makes sense then. Thanks.

Diego C

He has to. Otherwise he runs the risk of capturing his dad via Love Confession.

Cole Deucalion

I'm not 100% clear on why he told his dad about the company. From a reader perspective it's interesting to see an MC be so open with someone he cares about. So I'm not objecting or anything. I just don't get what the rationale was.

Skrubstar

Do not envy him web scraping several sources to make a database, but I suppose that’s what the mind of the bat provides. Enjoyed seeing the interactions with his father, and of course, the complexities with his relationship with Himeko

Anonymous Daniel

Kimiko continues to be just the best sort of waifu. Only ones that could potentially be comparable being momo or mina in setting.

Einar Strandberg

Himiko continues to be cute and best girl, even when her family makes me mad. The stuff with his dad was very cute too.

Slayer Anderson

As is alluded to, the intent is to create a pool of data for personal investigation in his vigilante ID. However, a byproduct of this research is that he now has data on legitimate crime that he could bring to the Endeavor Agency after a bit more polish.

Matthew Robar

Is he gonna use all that data in his vigilante persona? Or take it into his hero agency to get a bunch of bonus points


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