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29. Evolution

🕑 Added 2025-01-29 14:00:17 +0000 UTC

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Mojr

Sarah the Bard!!!!! Edit: mental manipulation esque

Marc Savage

Long is better. I would rather have 1 long than 5 short. The story flows better. There was an author i followed who posted almost daily but every post was a cliff hanger and a tiny part of a chapter

OverXelous

This is exactly what I want to portray in the story!! The government and HA area really just doing what they're designed to do. I doubt they're perfect, but from their POV they are doing the right thing and the AG is a problem. From the AG point of view, and those who distrust the government (rightfully or wrongfully) will likely think that they are the issue and that controlling this kind of stuff is bad. Neither are really right or wrong. Both likely have darker sides. It's largely going to be a matter or principles or perspective on who ends up siding with which side.

Thomas V.

I’m very curious where the tension between Sarah and Olivia is heading. Mostly because sure, being worried about the US government being controlling is reasonable enough (just look at all the shit that’s going on there), and very much something to keep in mind. The thing is though, it’s not like Sarah is wrong about what she said. The Guild *is* paywalling lifesaving info, and it *is* beholden to billionaires and other powerful people who don’t have the general public’s best interest in mind. The Guild really isn’t inherently better than the government because “mah freedom”, just because our main characters have only seen its good side. Just look at the shit Rylan is pulling (especially if he is indeed linked to the Untethered). The fact that Olivia has such a hard time acknowledging that is a bit worrying.

Hayden

Raven would be my go-to in this scenario. Knowledge and mental acuity can take one further than any of the other available options (imo), but I feel he might land on wolf for the survival, unity, and family aspects. Survival is exactly what he'd had to do before escaping the rift, and unity + family just make sense for where the story is progressing so far

OverXelous

Yeah I agree with you. Which is really the reason I didn't split it up to begin with. And I don't really want to get in the habit of "milking" the word count, so to say.

Roy Robinson

It was long, but I don't think anyone would ever say one was too long. I can see an argument for splitting it up for quality of your life, but as a reader I think it worked well. It also didn't have... I dunno what to call it, dramatic tension maybe, to justify multiple chapters? It was a dinner party and there were lots of interactions, add in a bunch of skill descriptions and you've got a lot of words but not so much "juice" that it would make sense to split it up.

Beeees!

Ya, I got a feeling that guys not gonna leave Sam alone. Being a druid will def help tho with extra vitality and constitution plus more def and offensive options. Anyone who thinks he'll be easy picking cause he's a healer will be in for a suprise

Beeees!

Seconded

spoonful_of_sugar

I love the way everything is playing out. Especially the classes and skills. Also, just the tip of the iceberg and Sarah's trait is shaping a very terrifying class. Kudos!

TJ O'Hare

Change Nothing. *thumbs up*


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