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Chapter 272 - Welcome To The Jungle

🕑 Added 2025-06-12 10:30:02 +0000 UTC

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Lucas Onderwater

Hey, thanks for reanding and the comment! And I can tootally see what you mean. I think because a lot of stuff is pre-planned long before I start writting, maybe things end up dragging a bit in some points because of all the stuff I want/need to include. Hopefully, this is something the editing process will streamline, but am I also trying to be more focused and tighten the narrative a bit. I'm not sure how well I succeeded in the first half of arc 3, as it's the point where I set a lot of crucial stuff for the second half of arc 3 and for the story beyond and Nar's growth, though... So, I'd really appreciate your thoughts at the end of arc 3 as well, if you be up for sharing them! All the best, and I hope you continue enjoying the story!

Ben Heggem

Liking the story, but the pacing is a bit slow. I don’t think we need the every conversation/scene like it was real life, as real life is slow and dull. Feels like the whole lead up to this dungeon and this chapter could have been 3/4 chapters, but we spent 2 chapters talking about hints the reader mostly knows and about 1 flower. I like that it builds the world and the connection more than going from action to action, but there’s a middle ground. Still like the story! Just thoughts especially for how long this will take

Lucas Onderwater

Hahaha "penetraded"! I guess it's not wrong 😅 As for Rel, we'll see what happens 👀

Mariusz

Will we see comeback of horny Rel? Or will she be not interested, since Nar got already penetrated by Tys?


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