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Beta Feedback for Nour
🕑 Added 2024-09-01 13:59:00 +0000 UTCA note for beta testers willing to help me on providing feedback.
As I get closer to wrapping Nour up and finalizing alot of parts, I need help.
1. If anyone is playing a phoenix that is distrustful of Nour or just a bit less hopeless romantic than Toxic Phoenix and is willing to give me feedback on their thoughts about that, please do. I'm looking for
do you see the natural progression towards your Phoenix trusting them more and more?
is the touch of romance natural or is it too fast? More on Phoenix than Nour as Nour is doing a speedrun.
what are your (or better yet your Phoenix's thoughts on Nour before Ch5 and Ch6 and then what do you imagine they will be after)
2. I'm also looking for just general feedback on their relationship thus far. If you think they're relationship is pretty fast then great. That's what I want. I don't mind if you think it's slow, per se, but not slow enough for you to say "my phoenix still feels nothing at all for Nour." If that is your thoughts then you're who I'm looking at for feedback on why and where to improve that.
Basically, by chapter five these two need to have tangles. Like your headphone cord after you threw them off to the side one day and you're trying to unravel them now.
3. And lastly, thoughts on Mikitas' death. I'm in the middle right now of either keeping it and just making sure to hammer in the "Nour this is your fault because of how you don't know how to act when it deals with Phoenix" or to just keep her alive period because I can obviously show the previous in other ways without Mikitas needlessly dying.
4. Alright. So. There won't be a sex scene like Ruben's cos of course, our little Phoenix has a touch problem. Like I'm going to include some very sensual scenes but nothing that comes out to an actual sex scene. What I can do though is add a wet dream or masturbation scene from Nour's PoV. Yay or nay?
