Lou Roth
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Update is OUT!
🕑 Added 2023-06-12 19:18:23 +0000 UTC
IT IS UPDATE TIME! For those of you who missed the dirty draft in the discord, the original play link has now been updated with 35 thousand words sizzling with exposition, and heated rivalry. I'm so excited!
Here's what's new:
Before we start, it took some honest critique for something to click for me, plot wise. I have been meandering with the plot, partly because I had no idea what I was even doing, and part because I really wanted to meander around in this new medium.
But, the plot I have planned is very high octane and epic in scale so I don’t want to bore you to death before we get to the good stuff.
So, don’t hunt me for sport when I tell you that (for the time being) I have removed the entire section of RO 101’s. I was so stubborn with shoehorning them in for the better part of a year, leading to writer's block and utter despair since it just wouldn’t fit; it wasn’t how you were supposed to learn about the RO’s. I have put them aside for now and tweaked Lenas scene once more so that it flows better- I am hemming and hawing over Id’s 101 because that one actually makes sense to have there, plotwise. It might go back in where it was, but I am still thinking about it.
Ok, for real this time though:
- The scenes where you scream, and your RO busts down the door Kool-Aid man style to save you, are there now.
- A meeting with Oma and a blast from your [origin] past!
- A whole chapter of lies and deceit, but it could literally be anyone lying. Careful who to trust.
- Is that… [REDACTED]?? Surely not.
- Another chapter where you get to choose your weapons and the way the surge manifests with your hunter.
On topic of the surge, the magic in Ouro, it is now a default for all players; you can choose from 4 different classes. The Battlefrenzied Zealot, The Beastmaster, The Etherweaver or The Vox Psion.
I had a terrible time writing the codexes for these classes, so some are partial and others missing, but if you continue you will experience them in actual action-scenes instead, weaponized. Don't forget to save!
For now, each class comes with its own weapon, but I will add more whenever extra time strikes, or when the draft is done.
I am going to remind you as I remind myself: This draft will get rougher around the edges, a little bit messy, as I am going to try to just draft the whole thing without even looking back. It will make my life so much easier when it comes to figuring out key scenes and motivations. While I wrote quite slowly as I treated OUROBOROS as a hobby, now I am working on it, which means skipping content I cannot think of on the spot just to keep the ball rolling. If you don't want to read the alpha draft, please wait with reading until the edited twine demo is out. Thank you!!
Now, ENJOY!
Comments
honeylou
Save a spot for me too lmaooo
Deirdre Lilin
Thanks for this beautiful work!! I will end in horny jail tho..
Aster
Have a good sleep, babes!
honeylou
Now I am become sleepy, the goer to bed x)
Aster
🥳🥳🥳
