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Irwin's Journey chapter 93: Familiar faces

🕑 Added 2023-04-29 20:05:23 +0000 UTC

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Carrarn

Thanks for the feedback! So, reverse order- I was trying to make it feel like more then a minute had passed, but I can understand it might not come across as such. I'll put some more effort into that scene to see it feels more logical. Now, I'm not really sure what to do about the Lamia part. It was my intention to make it an action of wanting to help Irwin, a not well thought out action where she ran after Balarn then halfway, after she lost him realized her action. I might just add that in her inner monologue, instead of having it be implied. I'll beep again after I fiddle with that combat scene a bit, got a few ideas on how to resolve the holding breath part.

Shane Kelly

I think a crippled Lamia trying to follow Balarn is ridiculous she wouldn't have a chance at 100% nevermind now. Kinda feels forced also Irwin almost passing out instantly from being suffocated is odd. I think most people can hold their breath for at least a minute.

Thanks for the chapter


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