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Irwin's Journey 406: Another call, another message

🕑 Added 2025-04-04 17:36:58 +0000 UTC

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Nicholas Del Rossi

while they do feel less urgent then i'd expect. with the way the storms are they probably could not travel without risk of sending the ships into the storm when the soul card transformation triggered.

Antony Claughton

The lack of urgency while the chaos whales are dying really meant I struggled with this chapter. Couldn’t they have Greldo pick him up and start transporting him to the whales after the soulcard forms but before they casually start reviewing cards and chatting? His body is still outside, so it’s not like it would change anything. He could then have the discussions while on the move. I do like the Pelin perspective, but when leaving the deck wouldn’t he also look at Irwin and comment that something was changing? It’s not like Irwin’s external body disappears. Just his consciousness.

Antony Claughton

By now, the storm before he had condensed around the heartcard ==> By now, the storm had condensed around the heartcard blinding golding pulse ==> blinding golden pulse atleast a tent remaining. Based on the growth it had gone through, it had likely still retained a quarter of the soulforce, ==> at least a tenth remaining. Based on the growth it had gone through, it had likely still retained a quarter of the soulforce, That previous paragraph probably needs review. Is it a tenth? A quarter of the original? ‘Tenth remaining’ implies 10% of what came before. Ambraz nodded ==> Irwin nodded Probably because it's not something you can easily undo, but a ==> Probably because it's not something you can easily undo, a


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