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Irwin's Journey 247: Brazardian

🕑 Added 2024-03-22 18:45:57 +0000 UTC

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Antony Claughton

“Stopping to examine them quickly revealed that both the trees as the vines were dull gray, living plants,”, the “as” should an “and”.

Antony Claughton

“Where the other mountainside cities Irwin had seen” should start with With. Inhabitable should be uninhabitable.

Stephen Pearson

Thanks for the chapter! :-) Also 'an entire city had been carved out of the nearest city'; not completely sure what the 2nd city is supposed to be, maybe mountain?

Carrarn

Fixed, thanks!

Doctor Black

Thanks for the chappy! Can’t wait for Irwin to meet him lol "Many won't ever get beyond rank two, and they usually bond with crafters or smiths with no chance of progressing passed amethyst rank." -> passed should be past I wonder what my own look like, he thought. -> looks like


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