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Irwin's Journey 307: Lips sealed

🕑 Added 2024-08-11 18:10:49 +0000 UTC

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Caleb Kerei

That would be good, stories always feel lesser when there isn't depth in some form to the home city/town/village. Helps ground the reader in the world

Eric M

Exploring the portal gallery is my second favorite part of the story behind the card forging. Look at the awesome mix of crew he's put together, now about to add Scintilla. And who knows what else or who else they will find as they explore more worlds. I won't complain if you want to punch up the story and add in more world building, etc. But I would say that seems like a place to add in a second story, or do a small Novella, maybe from someone unexpected's perspective. Maybe that ranger with the uncommon heart card who is bonded to one of the green birds - think it was Jort?

Stephen Pearson

Thanks for the chapter! :-)

sam

Whould be cool to see and could hep with eating up new or old story lines and just fleshing the world out 😁😁

Carrarn

Hey guys and girls, yesterday was hectic, and tomorrow will be the same. This is yesterday's chapter and the Sunday one should arrive for you Tuesday evening! That all said, Bremen is really gorgeous and we have fantastic weather. Been walking through the old town and it's actually giving me a lot of ideas. Something else: I had an interesting comment on RR from someone who said he hoped that I would flesh out Irwin's new world more instead of constantly running around. How do you guys feel about that? Should I spent some time during the rewrite/edit to extend the time part where Irwin was back again and add some more exploring of the world? It wouldn't change his own skills/build but I could use it to put in more world building for Irwin's new homeworld.


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