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Irwin's Journey 329: Embers

🕑 Added 2024-10-04 17:42:42 +0000 UTC

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Mariusz Klimczak

Wasn't salzirs supposed to be comparable to imps and one horned galubs? That is sentient, if not very intelligent? I find the tought of Irwin and company eating them repugnant.

Carrarn

True, but in this case its the storm sapping the heat. I might have done a poor job of creating a mental picture of that, so I'll add it to my list

Carrarn

I'm perfectly fine with the edits, thought I'd love them to be in a single comment if that's possible for you. If not, its fine like this ;)

Carrarn

The Fowlies mainly stay in the gas giants deeper area, but they come out to hunt to three of the four moons. Also, I'll have to go back and make sure to edit their name because I think I might have used mutliple versions of it throughout the story :)

Antony Claughton

contend ==> content

Antony Claughton

close to Ti ==> close to Zan

Antony Claughton

How knows ==> Who knows

Antony Claughton

alone ==> along Please let me know if you don’t want me posting edits.

Antony Claughton

Why would Dimarintsia be cold? It is an entrance to a high level world. The ship when away from a portal would be colder wouldn’t it?

Antony Claughton

I'm afraid just reaching it, figuring ==> I'm afraid just reaching Dimarsnia, figuring

Antony Claughton

blood ==> bloody

Antony Claughton

So, there are Flowies on both moons?

Antony Claughton

Tia ==> Mia

Antony Claughton

begin ==> begun

Samityaou

Thanks for the chapter ! Zender is definitely not infiltration material he can probably stay with his kids

Cal

Thanks for the chapter! Why do I get the feeling they are going to stay longer than a year 😂

Stephen Pearson

Thanks for the chapter! :-)

Fabian

Thanks for the chapter!


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