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Scene 3 + Additional
🕑 Added 2024-05-02 03:04:59 +0000 UTCThis first part is from some feedback I received from Brandon and sits at the start of Scene 2
ADDENDUM based on Brandons Notes from the start of the meeting at the coffee shop.
Taylor sits comfortably at the coffee shop as he scrolls Gwindur for tail. He glances over briefly and catches marty fussing with the door and seeming like a bit of a spaz as always.
Taylor notices immediately how over dressed Marty seems, and how he has been covering himself more and more over the years.
Taylor isn't so much judgemental but does chuckle to himself as he remembers the more lurid times they had spent together when younger. It's almost as though he's reverted back from his crossdressing awakening.
Taylor glances over a notification on his phone from Gwindur and notices Jessee blip on, briefly and disappear as though that means hes any less gay for checking. Clearly attempting to avoid still being called out by coworkers and family members as gay. Tut tut.
Though Taylor himself has acquired a more button down look, it is barely what you would call understated as his career in social marketing has allowed him to retain his usual exuberant self expression and has made him a popular go to for approaching the coveted Zoomer market.
Taylor flicks up the Gwindur app with his finger and takes a sip of his drink, doing so as seductively as he has subconsciously trained himself to be through the years, really not even aware of it anymore.
Marty drifts over the the order line, and taylor mouths his predictable order, Large, white mocha, half sweet, no whip.
In another universe Taylor would have been a professional tea leaf reader but for coffee orders, assessing those based on their orders and how they drink it.
But at this time, Taylor can only read what he sees, a friend whose frozen in time and no longer willing to take risks.
Distracted by his thoughts, Marty slides his tray in and starts the dialog
The following is scene 3 in some form for now. My aim is 45 pages so I believe a 4th scene is needed to tie this all together.
SCENE 3
At this juncture it would be okay I think to jump over to Jesse working a go nowhere job at Clippy (think Staples).
Dark page lightens to reveal Jesse pulling out a box from the cameras perspective and laying it down.
A coworker barks at him about some issue with the SKU numbering from last week and Jesse dismissively waves him off and tells him hes about to take his break,
Finding a moment to himself he dips out the back and lights a cigarette, still old fashioned, vapes be damned.
He opens his phone to log in to Gwindur to find Taylor logged and active, he quickly closes the app and forces quits it so he drops out of visibility.
Annoyed he puffs out a long held cloud of nicotine and lets its sizzle inside his brain as his body releases itself, his arms sagging on this knees, he stares out into the desolate parking lot of the multi store plaza. Another saturday at the big box store...
(Not sure how to go at this, I want this to be poignant and fully depressive, but definitely channel Dinner in America vibe)
Jesse cracks open his phone again and repeats Marty's action at the office, scrolling through history of bleak, gray photos, eventually his photos merging closer to the ones Marty scrolled through until they are both in the same photos.
Jesse takes another drag of his cig, amd puts his phone facing down, and blows out another load of nicotine exhausted smoke.
A co-worker nags him to get back on his shift since he wants to eat.
Jesse flicks his smoke and lugs himself back into the store.
A shot from inside the store, wide, long, hollow.
Jesse walks down the hallways looking for trash or misplaced items and badly arranged displays.
He overhears a familiar feminine voice,that of a recent. His initial reaction is to turn around but instead decides to pretend to arrange a display from the opposite side of the shelving and eavesdrop.
He overhears her and her friends loudly chatting, then dropping the loudness of their voice.
"Yeah, shh, I think he still works here."
"What really, isn't he in his 30's?"
"I mean, he's cute and has a good bod I could excuse dead end job, but the guy couldn't stay hard for longer than a few minutes."
"Haha OMG really?! Poor guy."
"Yeah, I think the only time he came was during anal while we watched mens figure skating..."
"no way...He's gay?"
She picks up a 8 balls meant as a executive decoration and shake it up and reveals the bottom and immediately start cackling.
"Hey lets talk about something else, he could be lurking around"
Jesse freezes and strolls away from the area hoping to not be noticed.
The girls wander off and Jesse returns to where they had been gossiping.
He looks at the 8 balls abnd it reads "Signs point to yes"
he shakes the 8 ball and turns it over putting it back with the others, letting out a deep sigh and moving on with his duties.
