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Love Addict's RPG Vol 2 Ch. 65

🕑 Added 2024-03-28 03:36:04 +0000 UTC

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PunishedKom

You sure changed your tune fast lmao I’ll implement these changes, thank you

HN

Thanks for the update! I must say, I really like these changes. I thought Zoe's exploration was hot before, but this was even better. Some editing notes: It was brutal - why is "it" in italics? she was fairly taller - tall write home about just yet. She wasn’t sure what to make of it just yet. - repetitive, remove the first "just yet"? It's just a little weirded out - I'm I haven't even kissed the fuckin' dude - they did kiss though? change to "frenched"? forcinf him - forcing I’m sure we Mia - remove "we" revved both of them off - up, not off (yet;)

PunishedKom

If you missed it I’ve said multiple times that she’s demisexual meaning she starts feeling sexual things the more emotionally attached to someone she is. This is just establishing her starting point.

Marauder

Not sure about Zoe not feeling anything. Makes her a strange choice for a heroine.

AzureXIII

Thank you for another great chapter the wait was definitely worth it. This volume has me so excited not only to see Zoe development but just the continuation of Mia's and Oliver's relationship. I can't wait to see their next heart event.

PunishedKom

I hate to repeat myself but y’all need to wait more than a few chapters before making a verdict lmao. I’m glad you’re liking her now, though! Things should be heading in a lot of fun directions with her, I think. Sexually and emotionally. Excited to explore more about her.

Govert Van Zee

Zoe started off kinda meh, now very interested in her development with our hero Oliver. Curious on what kinks, if any, she might develop in the future. And great to hear that you got out your road block!

PunishedKom

Thank you, I had a lot of fun with this one! I think the chemistry between the three of them was at its strongest so far, and I kept getting side tracked adding little interactions like the stuff about the collar lol

PunishedKom

Lmao sex scenes are tricky. Positioning is easy for me to imagine as a former lewd artist so that might have something to do with it, I always make sure it makes sense in my head and I’m not swapping people around constantly without explicitly saying who’s where. I mean the whole scene is just three people on a couch with Oliver (and then Zoe) on the middle, if that’s not easy to follow along with I would feel worried for my reader lol

Pulos

I like the pacing and your description is on point. What I mean is; at no point did a body position not make sense physically, or get changed unexpectedly. Last two full books I've read, great stories well developed world building and character growth... One does fade to Black, the other the sex scenes are so bad it feels like it's a completely different author. This is why I will continue to put down other books to read yours.

Maelstrom148

All of this is exactly what I needed injected directly into my heart today. Nice work!


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