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Chapter 397 - Tales of Adventure

🕑 Added 2024-11-26 04:01:37 +0000 UTC

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Alex Maher

Both battles were going on at the same time, yeah. But there's a few other factors: Communication would take a few hours each way so the report wouldnt have been far off. Chosen of Vesta would also be targetted by the warlocks to sabotage Alveron's ability to communicate. I hadn't considered that but I'll find a way to incorporate that info into Book 6 as it makes tactical sense and adds a bit of a problem.

BRUNO ASTUR

But if there was a mail exchange between the army inside the dungeon and the capital, to the point t that people outside of royal family knew what Hump was doing, then they should know about the attack o Alveron No? Or was it launched when the army comited to break the walls?

Alex Maher

Hmm. I could probably justify it, and that was one of my ideas for the ring. Always liked that scene from way of kings that was similar

Alex Maher

Chosen of Vesta have been providing reports back to Alveron too.

Fernando Roman

They arrived in the city with other chosen from the Infernal Halls. That’s how it probably spread, since heroic tales would be good for the morale of the city.

BRUNO ASTUR

How do they know about Hump being the one to open the gates to the Infernal's Halls. They just arrived and that information shouldn't be public iet considering the distance and difficulty of communications while they were inside the dungeon.

George R

Awesome chapter thanks so much

NameGame

Thanks for the chapter!

Armo

At the same time, Hump would probably want to take on someone that was like him - in need of help and with no-one else to turn to.

Hell 5pawn

If you end up rewriting this, does Hump have the skill with his Osidium ring to weave an illusion to go with the tale yet? You could offload the emotional imagery of the people in the feast (that of repressed depression, perhaps) onto literal imagery of a sand illusion.

Notcreepycreeper

He is going to the Wizards guild...maybe they pressure him to take an apprentice (spy)? It'd be a fun full circle if he, raised as a hedge wizard, ends up teaching an academy taught apprentice who is both awed by hump and simultaneously exasperated by his lack of 'foundational' academy knowlege

Notcreepycreeper

I agree with everything Telemonian said. To the loss of a son - I think you could take Rike in 2 ways, either he parties almost too hard with moments of grief showing through, or he is pretty reserved/sad with maybe moments of levity breaking through (like the Hump bread story and his daughter's feats). I also expected the Bud tension to exist and provide some comedy/character for Rike. It's been teed up for a looong while now, and his first interaction with Rike after returning was off screen, so it'd be fun to see during these slow chapters.

Alex Maher

thanks, fixed it

Alex Maher

I agree with everything you've said. It's one of those chapters where I need a bit of time off from it before doing another rewrite just to reset my brain

Rajeev Roy

Happy birthday boss

Telemonian

I think I understand why this one gave you trouble. Tonally it feels a little off. The battle just concluded, everyone is exhausted, Lord Rike just lost a son, and they’re having a merry feast? It feels like the team needs at least a day of R&R before feasting with Lord Rike. Maybe they get their rewards, rest for a day, then the feast? Likewise, there should probably be some greater acknowledgment from the Lord about the losses they suffered in the fighting. He lost his son - you’d think that would weigh heavily on him. Finally, there wasn’t any interaction with Bud, even though it was teed up in the prior chapter. There probably needs to be some kind of colder interaction between the two at the feast to maintain that tension (if you want it). Hope this helps! Generally, love your writing, so I know you’ll crack this

Imspinnennetz

Thanks for the chapter. I wonder if Hump will eventually pick up an apprentice in the future. It seems like many younger wizards would be interested. There are two paragraph sections that are repeated. The second helping bit and the Mind Eater bit.


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