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Chapter 1: Unforeseen Ritual Benefits

🕑 Added 2025-03-22 16:50:47 +0000 UTC

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Lightest_Reader

When I have time and inspiration hits.

Lape99

I like it, are you going to continue this story?

GODKINGASH

nice

Alex I

You have a frequent problem with proper use of perspective. It makes sense in a few places here where he's separating the previous Blaise from himself, but other times you shift into third person at random for just one action and it's becoming annoyingly frequent. Don't switch to He just to switch right back to I in the next sentence.

Vantas

don’t like the cheating bit, but that’s just my opinion, other wise it’s a great start to a new fanfic 😊


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