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Past Life Hero 3, ch 35

🕑 Added 2025-01-15 03:37:14 +0000 UTC

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Blaise Corvin

"Luckily, nothing had happened to her, and Max was already aware of this for a long time, but this was the first time he'd be visiting his mother in person." It's in the same sentence, fam. But even if it hadn't been, it could still be a stylistic choice to show scattered thought.

Petr Pavelka

“Luckily, nothing had happened to her” - this sentence does not make sense in the current context, because we don’t know who “her” is. We only learn that in the rest of the paragraph.

Adam

Great character development! Few notes: - I know you probably hate like half <"the"> shit in this place." - can of worms he was not goning <"going"> to open. - Nobody spoke or <"for"> a minute or two.

brandon marlborough

Max's mom is a riot I love her. good job on her character.

Richard Riley

Good on Lavinia!

Tetsu-nii

Wow. I love Max's mom. She kinda reminds me of my own mom.

John Doe

Aww, man! I almost cried by the time McDonald's came up. Nicely written, sir. Max seriously can't leave his mom hanging in the wind. She needs 24/7 protection. Some dumb-ass will eventually try to leverage her against him. It is only a matter of time.


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