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Ash's Big Gamble Part 6 *NSFW*
🕑 Added 2023-06-13 20:17:26 +0000 UTCThe Nightmare Continues!
Ash continues to suffer through the nightmare brought on by Trish's Gengar,
but could a dream really have that much impact on Ash and Gary's relationship back in reality?
The tale of Ash and Gary nears its end...
Lots of good scenes in this one.
Maybe a little sad in one part, but it's all in a dream so it's fiiine.
Once again, you already know this story is gonna have a happy ending, but the drama keeps it interesting right?
We'll see if I conclude this in the next part or if I have to wrap things up with an additional epilogue chapter.
Lastly, as always, let me know if there's anything you liked/disliked in the comments. I'm really trying to avoid redundant language, typos, text size problems, etc. and maybe get better at "dirty talk" in the lewder scenes.
Just to be clear, it's not a self-esteem thing and I'm not fishing for compliments/affirmation (although I do appreciate them haha. Hypocritical I know.) I just really want to get better with the writing in particular so if you any helpful thoughts or constructive criticism I'm all ears!
But if it's all good, it's all good!
Comments
MonsSlots
What will be the next thing released?
That's an idea worth considering
Stingrayking
I was thinking what about making them a double battle pair like in the games?
Nino Heđi
Another reason for my comment is that story follows route of acceptance so it stands to reason to include epilogue following story after let's say 1 year later when ash/ashley and gary are together as a couple, ash/by then transitioned and lives full time as a girl and possibly had SRS surgery and it could end with wedding scene with pikachu as ringbearer on wedding of Gary and Ashley. Time skip is just what i'd do so everything else is up to novelchef. I would like to see both final chapter and epilogue as 2 chapters in 1 post so... let's what novelchef decides
Sorry to spook you friend. I made a poll on whether people wanted to see some lewd stuff in the dream, and the results were an overwhelming "yes." But I'm curious, which part bothered you in particular? I thought I foreshadowed what was going to happen pretty well last week, so your surprise is surprising to me too. I was trying to give a little bit to everybody this week with the lewd scene and the frilly clothes, but I'm sorry if you didn't get anything out of it.
Lebruh-
Agreed. Definitely have an epilogue included or the ending will feel rushed
Nino Heđi
Well... You could either go with final chapter and epilogue chapter after that, or one huge post containg both at once. I don't see how will this work out without epilogue chapter.
TheAnimeGod
What the fuck
