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Intermission III: From Top to Bottom

🕑 Added 2023-05-30 16:42:55 +0000 UTC

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Sondrex76

Nice chapter, always interesting to see the consequences of Saturu's existence outside of his own circle. I found a few potential minor misspellings and such: "only bring to further misery for himself" -> "only bring further misery for himself" "be sure there will be hell to pay" -> "I will make sure there will be hell to pay" or "there will be hell to pay" "are already y such a troublemak" -> "are already such a troublemak" "to wonder his mind for" -> "to wander his mind for" "considered like a childish thing." could be "considered like a childish fancy.", or "considered a childish fancy." although it's probably fine as it is "was quite taller than the" -> ""was quite a bit taller than the "How will we name him" -> "What will we name him" "would be adapt to such a miracle." could be "would be adequate to such a miracle." or "would be good enough to such a miracle." "had him swore" -> "had him swear" "things and does he see the world…" -> "things and how he sees the world…" "if it just wouldn’t it have" -> "if it just wouldn’t have" "in the alley, he was recruited" -> "in the alley he was recruited" "see sings of both boys coming" -> "see signs of both boys coming" "not pious woman, but she" -> "not a pious woman, but she" Thanks for writing and have a great day!

Michael Fantacone

Thanks for the chapter. I agree with the person earlier. Hearing from the Cardinals, especially the one who is totally right(though doesn't know it) about Satrou. Also definitely need a intermission with everyone's favorite crazy half elf godkin.


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