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Chapter 65

🕑 Added 2025-02-15 06:16:26 +0000 UTC

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Gopard

Thanks for the chapter! The Mana thing is interesting, the dialogue witht he girls is nice but strange as well (HOW did they get enough space to do such long chats after they were pursued so hard last we saw them?), it lacks urgency... As if Marlene being shot was the main thing and not the fact that generally if you're close enough to get shot the ones who shot you can do that again or run up and gore you next... That also ties into why the first half "chatty kathy" perspective feels super strange and disconnected... Either this means the Lizardmen have completely decided to ignore the group now after the first attack failed and went back to their gathering and in 4 hours set up a neat gathering team rotation again finding and looting those supplies... OR they never even committed all their forces to attack the camp in the first place... And I doubt both of those things, first of all the Leader was among the attackers would he seriously let his goons not participate in the dangerous fighting and shadowland journey and instead gather super valuable materials? And secondly those guys were absolutely SHITTING themselves before the Midnight Earl. I'm highly skeptical the Earl said "yeah go ahead try to kill them if you want but don't overdue it guys wouldn't want to cut into your profits"... You may have explanations for those points in the next or future chapters if so than thats fine its simply a characteristic of webnovels and nothing to be changed. If you have explanations for those things in theory just written anywhere I would recommend looking how many people find it strange and either keeping it like this or including some small sentences like "After Marlene got shot we were lucky to loose them in [insert some short explanation here]". Similar for the Lizards if you show us their perspective to proof how scary Richard is now you could maybe also use it as a way to give some info on the situation "damn that the bosses send us out here to gather stuff (or make them a hunting party for the humans) right after that carnage and we got these annoying talismans..." or something. Those last to suggestions are just random things popped into my head might be completely stupid if so please disregard^^

Gopard

We saw this though those supplies supposedly appeared RIGHT as the attacks happened at camp so they couldnn't get the notifications and supplies because they had to run for their lives... What I think is MUCH more questionable is the timeline... As far as I remember after Marlene got Shot the group was still being chased by Lizardmen. So WHEN exactly did the Lizardmen either loose them, or decided to ignore them, get back to setting up huge orgnizational lines and plans and in the few hours already have enough teams equipped with talismans (MC literally said 5 hours) that the whole beginning of this chapter is remiscing about how "suddenly the efficiency of the gathering teams improved". Did it really? I would think it didn't right since you literally just wrote about dozens of them being killed in the escape and many of them should still be persuing the group???

Nathan Sto

Yeah, it seems really strange - all the rest of the supplies seem to have gone straight to humanity. Why did this one appear seemingly kilometers away from where they are?

Touch

So these guys have been using Mc’s black cards and resources all this time? And mc not even wanting to sent the stuff directly to recipient but old camp location. I don’t think this is a good plot point progression to the story…

Sammot

Tftc!


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