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Divine Apostasy Book 5 - Chapter 5

🕑 Added 2021-04-24 07:29:36 +0000 UTC

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A. F. Kay

Thanks again, Sweet! I appreciate you taking the time to comment on these things. I will make a note of them.

Suggestions: You have completed the quest “The Southern Front (Part 3)” / Foundations (Part 3)" Both are missing periods after (Part 3) The stats gave Ruwen great satisfaction. His stats Makes it more personal. Ruwen, Hamma, and Niall had entered the pine forest not long after leaving the lakeshore, and soon after, Blapy’s guards had shadowed them. delete both "had"s. the rest of the paragraph is "happening now". But this centipede scared him far more than a Toxic Silver Centipede. Awkward. more than a Toxic Silver Centipede would have. (?) more than the Toxic Silver Centipede had. (?) Blapy glared are Ruwen. at Ruwen.

A. F. Kay

Thank you!

Robert Gunnlaugsson

Here’s another typo in chapter 5. “I don’t mean preventing my physically.” The word “my” should be “me”.

A. F. Kay

Thanks! The spacing issues are something I only see on Patreon when I cut and paste it into their system. I had this issue a lot with the fourth book and triple-checked it. Almost always spacing issues are just a Patreon display thing. It happens a lot with italics as well. But I appreciate you noticing.

A. F. Kay

Haha. Yeah. Like stop stalking me!

Robert Gunnlaugsson

I noticed that the spacing after the colon in many of the stat entries isn’t consistent. The space between the colon and the stat value really aids with readability. All in all, another great chapter that whets one’s appetite for more. Great work!

Jeremiah Halstead

Ruwen should say 'Blapy, don't you have anything better to do that predict where I'm going to be and show up?' Not really, we just know that as readers. Though it would be nice to know if Ruwen has fully realized this

MillionLittleE

The sass that ruwen just gave blapy. Who is a god and he just doesn’t care.

A. F. Kay

One of my favorites, for sure!

Lena M. Lucente

I LOVE Blapy's character. Her relationship with Ruwen is so great.


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