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Divine Apostasy Book 9 - Prologue (Revised)

🕑 Added 2023-07-22 09:00:01 +0000 UTC

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A. F. Kay

I cleaned this up. Thanks!

A. F. Kay

Thank you!

A. F. Kay

Thank you!!!!!

Brian Heffington

Honestly love your work and everytime I read I get goosebumps and get transported in this beautiful world you created. Keep up the good work!

Cara Pleym

This was so much clearer, I didn’t fully understand the dissolution of the pact but the conversation is this revision makes Miranda’s subterfuge evident and all the more impactful for it.

Nathan Emerson

In the second to last paragraph, is it supposed to say izac was mad at Lal? Shouldn't it be Naktos was mad at Lal?

Tyler S.

Enjoy the new changes and the fact that Miranda openly states which side shes on... On another note. [Wenquian, not hiding her shock and fear as well as Naktos replied to the god.] I feel this reads a bit weird and may work better with; [...fear as controlled/composed/easily as Naktos, replied to the god.]

Julene May

"A small group of demons" versus now "As small..."

Suzette Johnson

Definitely better!!

Asheron Wilder

I like how Miranda is treating dimensional storage in this version. Using the threat of rescinding storage is probably the more effective strategy, since it will bias the weaker deities or those on the fence toward inaction.

Joe

Yeah, it’s better.


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