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(Enchanting Melodies) Chapter 105: One Step Forwards

🕑 Added 2023-07-29 12:08:37 +0000 UTC

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ha vu

I think Enchanting Melodies is really good, and it is my favorite work of yours. I literally read everything in 2 days and eagerly waited for new chapters. I think only using HP as a setting is better for the story because it is tighter and makes for a more coherent magic system. And as Harry has yet too lived for too long, I don't suffer the weariness I did after reading around 200 chapters of Magic Marvel (it is good but the scope of the world, the characters, and the leap through time of the MC just overwhelm me and I can't continue). Personally, I think nothing of Arcane Hearing as it might just be some special ability Harry was born with like Luna's clairvoyance. Some people are just born with something better. And the condition surrounding his birth is rather mysterious. If we compare this with the event in Luna life, they both suffered the lost of their parents, and there is a lot of magic involved. I think Harry is very out of his depth in a game of manipulation and deceit but he could get better at it. At least I would enjoy it if he could learn to lie like a second nature. I almost convinced that L actually liked Light as a friend until the author outright confirm that L was lying. The combination of socially inept behavior and lying like nothing is unexpected and dangerous. And be more clinical in the game, L managed to hold out so long and almost turn the table on Light thanks to him keeping his composure and thinking things logically. "Follow your heart and your body will crumble. " - Kei Nagai.

athass_prkr

It's actually a good idea if you consider what I've shown you in the world so far. Well, the issue with that is that I literally built the entire world, the magic system, the family histories and so on, before writing anything. There was something about the Potter family in the world I built that I wanted to explore later on, hence why I chose Harry as the MC, and to avoid just following canon, I made Neville the BWL. It's hard to get into details without spoiling too much. Having an OC self-insert as Sirius Black's son is a great idea, and I might even do it as my next story, but the narrative I planned in the third and fourth years will be honestly a lot more different than you might think, so much as the entire canon would be completely different. It's why I killed off Sirius in the first place since I don't want him to escape from Azkaban. Honestly, your idea has a lot of potential to develop, and I would recommend you pursue it if you're interested in writing it. It's just that the story development would have been different than the one I planned for, and it wouldn't utilize the world that I created effectively if the MC wasn't Harry.

Sukhraj Singh

Good chapter as always. I have to say that, at times I wish you would have created and OC self-insert as a main character, maybe the illegetimate son of Sirius Black, as your MC instead of self-insert Harry and kept canon Harry as the BWL. As that would have created great tension news that Sirius Black betrayed his parents to Voldemort from him till 3rd year as his son would be in the same year as Harry. Only for the events of the third year have him discover that Sirius never betrayed his parent and was innocent which would create great tension between Harry and MC, given that Sirius would have to deal with the anamosity between his son and godson. That has potential for a lot of drama. Plus, Sirius would be thrown a curve ball at the news that he had a son. Someone his grandfather Arcturus Black actually approves of and made heir of the Black family.


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